I wrote a poem for class and I was wonder if I could get some feed back (picture in comments)

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Trans1diot · Answer

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Trans1diot · Answer

@fortish wrote:

I love! keep it up!

Ty!

Fortish · Answer

I love it! keep it up

dulceespapi · Answer

Very nice!

ryley · Answer

Thats nice!

Astro · Answer

Honestly more a story than a poem, I think it could use some work to be completely honest. What kind of poem is this also?

ctompk3743 · Answer

This Is awesome I love It 100/100 keep It up

Trans1diot · Answer

@astro wrote:

Honestly more a story than a poem, I think it could use some work to be completely honest. What kind of poem is this also?

Idk my teacher didn't give any instruction she just said write a poem but ty for the feed back ^^'

Astro · Answer

You're welcome, Just work on the structure.

mrwhskers · Answer

It's the best :^

zippymusbe · Answer

@trans1diot wrote:

this shit is hot ass

Trans1diot · Answer

@zippymusbe wrote:

@trans1diot wrote:

this shit is hot ass

Uhm what?

mrwhskers · Answer

@zippymusbe wrote:

@trans1diot wrote:

this shit is hot ass

What?

zippymusbe · Answer

@trans1diot wrote:

@zippymusbe wrote:

@trans1diot wrote:

this shit is hot ass

Uhm what?

this shitty ass poem

Trans1diot · Answer

@zippymusbe wrote:

@trans1diot wrote:

@zippymusbe wrote:

@trans1diot wrote:

this shit is hot ass

Uhm what?

this shitty ass poem

Oh oki ty for the feed back ^^

mrwhskers · Answer

@zippymusbe wrote:

@trans1diot wrote:

@zippymusbe wrote:

@trans1diot wrote:

this shit is hot ass

Uhm what?

this shitty ass poem

._. that's not true, it's a good poem.

zippymusbe · Answer

@mrwhskers wrote:

@zippymusbe wrote:

@trans1diot wrote:

@zippymusbe wrote:

@trans1diot wrote:

this shit is hot ass

Uhm what?

this shitty ass poem

._. that's not true, it's a good poem.

shut yo ass up who was talkin to yo bitch ass

zippymusbe · Answer

@zippymusbe wrote:

@mrwhskers wrote:

@zippymusbe wrote:

@trans1diot wrote:

@zippymusbe wrote:

@trans1diot wrote:

this shit is hot ass

Uhm what?

this shitty ass poem

._. that's not true, it's a good poem.

shut yo ass up who was talkin to yo bitch ass

zippymusbe · Answer

@zippymusbe wrote:

@mrwhskers wrote:

@zippymusbe wrote:

@trans1diot wrote:

@zippymusbe wrote:

@trans1diot wrote:

this shit is hot ass

Uhm what?

this shitty ass poem

._. that's not true, it's a good poem.

shut yo ass up who was talkin to yo bitch ass

zippymusbe · Answer

@zippymusbe wrote:

@mrwhskers wrote:

@zippymusbe wrote:

@trans1diot wrote:

@zippymusbe wrote:

@trans1diot wrote:

this shit is hot ass

Uhm what?

this shitty ass poem

._. that's not true, it's a good poem.

shut yo ass up who was talkin to yo bitch ass

zippymusbe · Answer

@zippymusbe wrote:

@mrwhskers wrote:

@zippymusbe wrote:

@trans1diot wrote:

@zippymusbe wrote:

@trans1diot wrote:

this shit is hot ass

Uhm what?

this shitty ass poem

._. that's not true, it's a good poem.

shut yo ass up who was talkin to yo bitch ass

zippymusbe · Answer

@zippymusbe wrote:

@mrwhskers wrote:

@zippymusbe wrote:

@trans1diot wrote:

@zippymusbe wrote:

@trans1diot wrote:

this shit is hot ass

Uhm what?

this shitty ass poem

._. that's not true, it's a good poem.

shut yo ass up who was talkin to yo bitch ass

mrwhskers · Answer

@zippymusbe wrote:

@mrwhskers wrote:

@zippymusbe wrote:

@trans1diot wrote:

@zippymusbe wrote:

@trans1diot wrote:

this shit is hot ass

Uhm what?

this shitty ass poem

._. that's not true, it's a good poem.

shut yo ass up who was talkin to yo bitch ass

-_- I forgot I wasn't allowed to comment when people aren't talking me, bc oh right people can't speak unless they are spoken too, nah I'm being sarcastic sthu no one cares. <3

zippymusbe · Answer

@mrwhskers wrote:

@zippymusbe wrote:

@mrwhskers wrote:

@zippymusbe wrote:

@trans1diot wrote:

@zippymusbe wrote:

@trans1diot wrote:

this shit is hot ass

Uhm what?

this shitty ass poem

._. that's not true, it's a good poem.

shut yo ass up who was talkin to yo bitch ass

-_- I forgot I wasn't allowed to comment when people aren't talking me, bc oh right people can't speak unless they are spoken too, nah I'm being sarcastic sthu no one cares. <3

who asked

mrwhskers · Answer

@zippymusbe wrote:

@mrwhskers wrote:

@zippymusbe wrote:

@mrwhskers wrote:

@zippymusbe wrote:

@trans1diot wrote:

@zippymusbe wrote:

@trans1diot wrote:

this shit is hot ass

Uhm what?

this shitty ass poem

._. that's not true, it's a good poem.

shut yo ass up who was talkin to yo bitch ass

-_- I forgot I wasn't allowed to comment when people aren't talking me, bc oh right people can't speak unless they are spoken too, nah I'm being sarcastic sthu no one cares. <3

who asked

You don't have to ask for me to speak.

zippymusbe · Answer

@mrwhskers wrote:

@zippymusbe wrote:

@mrwhskers wrote:

@zippymusbe wrote:

@mrwhskers wrote:

@zippymusbe wrote:

@trans1diot wrote:

@zippymusbe wrote:

@trans1diot wrote:

this shit is hot ass

Uhm what?

this shitty ass poem

._. that's not true, it's a good poem.

shut yo ass up who was talkin to yo bitch ass

-_- I forgot I wasn't allowed to comment when people aren't talking me, bc oh right people can't speak unless they are spoken too, nah I'm being sarcastic sthu no one cares. <3

who asked

You don't have to ask for me to speak.

like i said who asked you aint answer my question

mrwhskers · Answer

@zippymusbe wrote:

@mrwhskers wrote:

@zippymusbe wrote:

@mrwhskers wrote:

@zippymusbe wrote:

@mrwhskers wrote:

@zippymusbe wrote:

@trans1diot wrote:

@zippymusbe wrote:

@trans1diot wrote:

this shit is hot ass

Uhm what?

this shitty ass poem

._. that's not true, it's a good poem.

shut yo ass up who was talkin to yo bitch ass

-_- I forgot I wasn't allowed to comment when people aren't talking me, bc oh right people can't speak unless they are spoken too, nah I'm being sarcastic sthu no one cares. <3

who asked

You don't have to ask for me to speak.

like i said who asked you aint answer my question

Like I just said who needs to ask to speak? I can say whatever I want you stupid twat <3

zippymusbe · Answer

@mrwhskers wrote:

@zippymusbe wrote:

@mrwhskers wrote:

@zippymusbe wrote:

@mrwhskers wrote:

@zippymusbe wrote:

@mrwhskers wrote:

@zippymusbe wrote:

@trans1diot wrote:

@zippymusbe wrote:

@trans1diot wrote:

this shit is hot ass

Uhm what?

this shitty ass poem

._. that's not true, it's a good poem.

shut yo ass up who was talkin to yo bitch ass

-_- I forgot I wasn't allowed to comment when people aren't talking me, bc oh right people can't speak unless they are spoken too, nah I'm being sarcastic sthu no one cares. <3

who asked

You don't have to ask for me to speak.

like i said who asked you aint answer my question

Like I just said who needs to ask to speak? I can say whatever I want you stupid twat <3

shut up bummmmmm boy stop catfishing

mrwhskers · Answer

@zippymusbe wrote:

@mrwhskers wrote:

@zippymusbe wrote:

@mrwhskers wrote:

@zippymusbe wrote:

@mrwhskers wrote:

@zippymusbe wrote:

@mrwhskers wrote:

@zippymusbe wrote:

@trans1diot wrote:

@zippymusbe wrote:

@trans1diot wrote:

this shit is hot ass

Uhm what?

this shitty ass poem

._. that's not true, it's a good poem.

shut yo ass up who was talkin to yo bitch ass

-_- I forgot I wasn't allowed to comment when people aren't talking me, bc oh right people can't speak unless they are spoken too, nah I'm being sarcastic sthu no one cares. <3

who asked

You don't have to ask for me to speak.

like i said who asked you aint answer my question

Like I just said who needs to ask to speak? I can say whatever I want you stupid twat <3

shut up bummmmmm boy stop catfishing

I'm not cat fishing XD

zippymusbe · Answer

@zippymusbe wrote:

@mrwhskers wrote:

@zippymusbe wrote:

@mrwhskers wrote:

@zippymusbe wrote:

@mrwhskers wrote:

@zippymusbe wrote:

@mrwhskers wrote:

@zippymusbe wrote:

@trans1diot wrote:

@zippymusbe wrote:

@trans1diot wrote:

this shit is hot ass

Uhm what?

this shitty ass poem

._. that's not true, it's a good poem.

shut yo ass up who was talkin to yo bitch ass

-_- I forgot I wasn't allowed to comment when people aren't talking me, bc oh right people can't speak unless they are spoken too, nah I'm being sarcastic sthu no one cares. <3

who asked

You don't have to ask for me to speak.

like i said who asked you aint answer my question

Like I just said who needs to ask to speak? I can say whatever I want you stupid twat <3

shut up bummmmmm boy stop catfishing

mrwhskers · Answer

@zippymusbe wrote:

@mrwhskers wrote:

@zippymusbe wrote:

@mrwhskers wrote:

@zippymusbe wrote:

@mrwhskers wrote:

@zippymusbe wrote:

@mrwhskers wrote:

@zippymusbe wrote:

@trans1diot wrote:

@zippymusbe wrote:

@trans1diot wrote:

this shit is hot ass

Uhm what?

this shitty ass poem

._. that's not true, it's a good poem.

shut yo ass up who was talkin to yo bitch ass

-_- I forgot I wasn't allowed to comment when people aren't talking me, bc oh right people can't speak unless they are spoken too, nah I'm being sarcastic sthu no one cares. <3

who asked

You don't have to ask for me to speak.

like i said who asked you aint answer my question

Like I just said who needs to ask to speak? I can say whatever I want you stupid twat <3

shut up bummmmmm boy stop catfishing

Trans idiot has actually vced with me b4 so I'm not cat fishing <3

mrwhskers · Answer

@mrwhskers wrote:

@zippymusbe wrote:

@mrwhskers wrote:

@zippymusbe wrote:

@mrwhskers wrote:

@zippymusbe wrote:

@mrwhskers wrote:

@zippymusbe wrote:

@mrwhskers wrote:

@zippymusbe wrote:

@trans1diot wrote:

@zippymusbe wrote:

@trans1diot wrote:

this shit is hot ass

Uhm what?

this shitty ass poem

._. that's not true, it's a good poem.

shut yo ass up who was talkin to yo bitch ass

-_- I forgot I wasn't allowed to comment when people aren't talking me, bc oh right people can't speak unless they are spoken too, nah I'm being sarcastic sthu no one cares. <3

who asked

You don't have to ask for me to speak.

like i said who asked you aint answer my question

Like I just said who needs to ask to speak? I can say whatever I want you stupid twat <3

shut up bummmmmm boy stop catfishing

Trans idiot has actually vced with me b4 so I'm not cat fishing <3

You can also ask frog girl Emmy that's my sister

zippymusbe · Answer

frog girl is my hoe

zippymusbe · Answer

she be given me that gawk gawk 3000

mrwhskers · Answer

@zippymusbe wrote:

she be given me that gawk gawk 3000

Emmy says she doesn't know you

zippymusbe · Answer

@mrwhskers wrote:

@zippymusbe wrote:

she be given me that gawk gawk 3000

Emmy says she doesn't know you

she is my sex slave

Trans1diot · Answer

I-

mrwhskers · Answer

@zippymusbe wrote:

@mrwhskers wrote:

@zippymusbe wrote:

she be given me that gawk gawk 3000

Emmy says she doesn't know you

she is my sex slave

No she ain't :/

mrwhskers · Answer

@mrwhskers wrote:

@zippymusbe wrote:

@mrwhskers wrote:

@zippymusbe wrote:

she be given me that gawk gawk 3000

Emmy says she doesn't know you

she is my sex slave

No she ain't :/

Sthu

zippymusbe · Answer

@mrwhskers wrote:

@zippymusbe wrote:

@mrwhskers wrote:

@zippymusbe wrote:

she be given me that gawk gawk 3000

Emmy says she doesn't know you

she is my sex slave

No she ain't :/

i be hittin that from the back

Trans1diot · Answer

Bro she literally doesn't know you

zippymusbe · Answer

Lick me, f,uck me
Touch me, suck me
Sl,ut me (Butter me)
No more lovey-dovey
Just want cuddy (cuddy)
Addicted to p,ussy
I am a druggie (I am a druggie)
Dark skin, sweet on the inside
My nutty buddy (mwah)
Suck on my Glock like you suck my c,ock
That s,hit done turned me on (s,hit done turned me on)
She get freaky up when she seen my flash
From my camera phone (movie)
Climb on this di,ck,
Know it's a long journey, but it's throne

mrwhskers · Answer

@zippymusbe wrote:

@mrwhskers wrote:

@zippymusbe wrote:

@mrwhskers wrote:

@zippymusbe wrote:

she be given me that gawk gawk 3000

Emmy says she doesn't know you

she is my sex slave

No she ain't :/

i be hittin that from the back

You do know that she is a minor right? And that she doesn't know you, your just down right discusting

Trans1diot · Answer

And Emmy is my gf's sister so sthu and stop talking about her like that

zippymusbe · Answer

@mrwhskers wrote:

@zippymusbe wrote:

@mrwhskers wrote:

@zippymusbe wrote:

@mrwhskers wrote:

@zippymusbe wrote:

she be given me that gawk gawk 3000

Emmy says she doesn't know you

she is my sex slave

No she ain't :/

i be hittin that from the back

You do know that she is a minor right? And that she doesn't know you, your just down right discusting

dam im going to jail because i am 20

mrwhskers · Answer

@trans1diot wrote:

And Emmy is my gf's sister so sthu and stop talking about her like that

Exactly.

Trans1diot · Answer

Omg-

zippymusbe · Answer

jk jk jk jk jk jk jk jk
this was a joke i am trying to get banned on qc

zippymusbe · Answer

i am only 13 years old

Trans1diot · Answer

Ew wth would you joke like that-

mrwhskers · Answer

That's nasty bro that's my sis, don't joke bout her like that
.

zippymusbe · Answer

dis dat dis dat pls get off my Ice Cream now

Trans1diot · Answer

._. Ayo-

zippymusbe · Answer

@mrwhskers wrote:

That's nasty bro that's my sis, don't joke bout her like that .

buti just did

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