Hey, i wrote a song and was hoping for some criticism so lay it on thick the good and the bad pls :)
closure:
Did we both fall in love
Before we were ready?
did we both let go
Before things where steady?
I don't know, I don't know, all I know
Is that now I'm alone
Were we both too scared?
Or were just not prepared ?
For the future and all
The mistakes that it bears
all I know
Is that now I'm alone
Yeah, these are questions in my head
Answers I know I won’t get
Thoughts I never said
That I kinda wish I did
I guess sometimes you find the one
But the timing's off
The age is wrong
Maybe we would be closer
If we were a couple years older
I guess sometimes you fall in love
Then one day you wake up
And everything's over
Without any closure
Did we both think that this
Was for the best all around?
Or were we too afraid
To have no one around?
I don't know, all I know
Is that now I'm alone
Did we hope on a star
That was a little to far
Was the age between us
Too great for our hearts?
I don't know, all I know
Is that now I'm alone
Yeah, these are questions in my head
Answers I know I won't get
Thoughts I never said
That I kinda wish I did
I guess sometimes you find the one
But the timing's off
The place is wrong
Maybe we would be closer
If we were a couple years older
I guess sometimes you fall in love
Then one day feels like you wake up
And everything's over
Without any closure
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Rigo:
felt 😭
ParisJ06:
@rigo wrote:
felt 😭
yessir
personification:
It SmElLs LiKe Pickle
100k:
I absolutely love this so much! Great job <333
ParisJ06:
@100k wrote:
I absolutely love this so much! Great job <333
thank you so much :)
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100k:
@parisj06 wrote:
@100k wrote:
I absolutely love this so much! Great job <333
thank you so much :)
ofc, keep writing more!
anthony5012005:
really good great job 10000/10000
ParisJ06:
@personification wrote:
It SmElLs LiKe Pickle
YuMmY
ParisJ06:
@anthony5012005 wrote:
really good great job 10000/10000
thank you
anthony5012005:
@parisj06 wrote:
@anthony5012005 wrote:
really good great job 10000/10000
thank you
yw
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personification:
@parisj06 wrote:
@personification wrote:
It SmElLs LiKe Pickle
YuMmY
supposed to be the A word yk
Mrrippeter:
Omg Paris this was really good low-key wish u had good bars but it was deep and real good!
ParisJ06:
@personification wrote:
@parisj06 wrote:
@personification wrote:
It SmElLs LiKe Pickle
YuMmY
supposed to be the A word yk
oops
Mrrippeter:
I had good bars not u lol
ParisJ06:
@mrrippeter wrote:
Omg Paris this was really good low-key wish u had good bars but it was deep and real good!
thank youuuuuu love yaa
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Mrrippeter:
@mrrippeter wrote:
Omg Paris this was really good low-key wish i had good bars but it was deep and real good!
mrwhskers:
IT. IS. AMAZING PARISSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSS YOU DID SO WEELLLLLLLLLLLLLLLLLLLLLLL
ParisJ06:
@mrwhskers wrote:
IT. IS. AMAZING PARISSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSS YOU DID SO WEELLLLLLLLLLLLLLLLLLLLLLL
AHHHHHHH THANKSSSSSS EEEE
Mrrippeter:
Thanks Paris ur super talented
mrwhskers:
@parisj06 wrote:
@mrwhskers wrote:
IT. IS. AMAZING PARISSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSS YOU DID SO WEELLLLLLLLLLLLLLLLLLLLLLL
AHHHHHHH THANKSSSSSS EEEE
YWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWW
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ParisJ06:
@mrrippeter wrote:
Thanks Paris ur super talented
aww im not blushin you are
Mrrippeter:
Girl am I making u blush oh no lol
ParisJ06:
@mrrippeter wrote:
Girl am I making u blush oh no lol
idkkkkk r u
personification:
@mrrippeter wrote:
Thanks Paris ur super talented
talent is objective, meaning if you see good things as awful then awful things will seem good
pretty common misconception
Mrrippeter:
@parisj06 wrote:
@mrrippeter wrote:
Girl am I making u blush oh no lol
idkkkkk r u
@parisj06 wrote:
@mrrippeter wrote:
Girl am I making u blush oh no lol
idkkkkk r u
Am I hmmmm
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ParisJ06:
@personification wrote:
@mrrippeter wrote:
Thanks Paris ur super talented
talent is objective, meaning if you see good things as awful then awful things will seem good
pretty common misconception
well is there anything that you think is wrong with it maybe I can fix it to where your satisfied
Mrrippeter:
Idk if I am lol
ParisJ06:
@mrrippeter wrote:
@parisj06 wrote:
@mrrippeter wrote:
Girl am I making u blush oh no lol
idkkkkk r u
@parisj06 wrote:
@mrrippeter wrote:
Girl am I making u blush oh no lol
idkkkkk r u
Am I hmmmm
hmmmmmm
idkkk
personification:
deletus pleasus
ParisJ06:
@personification wrote:
deletus pleasus
im just trying to improve and deleting doesn't give room for improvement if you don't like it then you said your piece so you can go
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personification:
well not i feel bad
personification:
now*
Mrrippeter:
Girl has raw skills ngl
Ashlynisannoying:
its really goodddddd
Mrrippeter:
@ashlynisannoying wrote:
its really goodddddd
Yes she is
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ParisJ06:
@personification wrote:
now*
@personification wrote:
well not i feel bad
sorry im not trying to make you feel bad just trying to make everyone happy
personification:
btw line 4 where should be were
ParisJ06:
@ashlynisannoying wrote:
its really goodddddd
thank you so much
Ashlynisannoying:
@parisj06 wrote:
@ashlynisannoying wrote:
its really goodddddd
thank you so much
of course!
ParisJ06:
@personification wrote:
btw line 4 where should be were
thanks lol I just did It today lol and haven't put much care into grammar
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Mrrippeter:
Ppl this is so cool I hope that one day u can share this with the world and show ur musical abilities to everyone!
personification:
typo*
@parisj06 wrote:
@personification wrote:
btw line 4 where should be were
thanks lol I just did It today lol and haven't put much care into grammar
ParisJ06:
@mrrippeter wrote:
Ppl this is so cool I hope that one day u can share this with the world and show ur musical abilities to everyone!
aw thank you so much
ilikemexicans:
its a good song i love it sm
ParisJ06:
@ilikemexicans wrote:
its a good song i love it sm
thank you :)
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Mrrippeter:
I love it as well
5172319:
OMG I LOVE IT - u shoiuld sing it and put it on spotify :D
Sharkattack123:
Thats goood
ParisJ06:
@5172319 wrote:
OMG I LOVE IT - u shoiuld sing it and put it on spotify :D
Thank you so much and lol I don’t sing
ParisJ06:
@sharkattack123 wrote:
Thats goood
Thank you :)
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Sharkattack123:
yw
5172319:
@parisj06 wrote:
@5172319 wrote:
OMG I LOVE IT - u shoiuld sing it and put it on spotify :D
Thank you so much and lol I don’t sing
oh ookk
624Simpson:
i felt that its heat make more
1008426:
10/10 its really good
ParisJ06:
@624simpson wrote:
i felt that its heat make more
Thanks lol
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ParisJ06:
@1008426 wrote:
10/10 its really good
Thank you. Means a lot
1008426:
@parisj06 wrote:
@1008426 wrote:
10/10 its really good
Thank you. Means a lot
yww keep up the good work c:
gilromer017:
I have someone in my life rn and I wonder when/if its all over ill think the same thing this song explains so well. It hit my heart and resounded within me. AMAZING JOB!! More pls <3