Question

Could some one tell me what they think of Part 2 of my story?

Answer 1

He is so cute, just laying in my bed, next to me. I need to pee but I don't want to wake him. Maybe if I just gently move off the bed. Okay, just need to scoot, scoot and scoot. And I am off the bed. Now I can go pee. Right after I finished using the bathroom I heard someone knock at the front door. I looked out the peephole and I saw Ben's "friends" (Jack and Paul) outside. I ran straight to Ben to wake him up because I was so scared, then I ran to Aria's bedroom. They were both up when they heard the door knock again. All three of us were ready to beat them if they tried to hurt me again. When we opened the door, I could tell that they didn't expect all three of us there. They looked straight at me for a few seconds then turned to Ben and started to talk to him.

"Hey Man, where were you, we thought we were going to the bar?" Jack asked.

"Yeah I changed my mind, I wanted to hangout with Liv then we got tired and I fell asleep in her bed." Ben said happily.

"Do you guys need anything?" I said scaredly.

"No, we are fine." Paul said with an angry look.

"Then why did you guys show up, just to ask a question, you can do that over text. Not going to lie, this is kind of suspicious." Aria explained happily.

"We got to go, bye." Jack and Paul said.

When they started to walk down the hall, Paul looked back at me and mouthed, "We know what you did." Oh my god, they know I told Ben, but why didn't they try to do something. And I know there were three of us there but we didn't look very strong. Well except for Ben, but he wasn't too much stronger. I soon realized they knew something about Ben that I didn't. I asked Ben why they looked afraid of him.

"Oh, well I think it's time to tell you, Aria you should listen too." Ben said nervously.

"When I was little my Mom always used to do something in the basement, my dad went down there one day to see what she was doing and he never came back up. I didn't go down that day, but the next day I wanted to see if my dad was in trouble. Luckily my mom was at the store. When I went down I saw my dad's head on top of a pole. I screamed so loudly my neighbors heard me and came to the front door. I ran up to them and told them I thought I saw a snake. I was little at the time and didn't want to get my mom in trouble. I would later regret that. My mom never realized I went down there. I knew my dad was dead, but she didn't know I knew he was gone. She brought me to the basement and tied me down to the table." Ben sadly said.

"Oh my god, Ben I know she is about to something horrible and that's awful you had to see your dad's head." I told him.

"Yea, I couldn't escape and I couldn't scream either. She obviously didn't kill me, but she took a needle with pink liquid and injected it in my neck. I was use to needles because of my check-ups. She took me to bed and woke me up the next day for school. I didn't remember anything from yesterday. I didn't want to go to school because kids always bullied me, but I rather go than stay here with my killer mom who killed my dad. I did have two friends, Jake and Paul, now that I think about they never stood up for me. Two other boys came up to me and tried to push me and hit me but I felt so much stronger. I was sick and tired of being bullied I hit both of them. And from that punch on both of them I broke both of their nose and broke their arms."

"So that's why Jake and Paul are afraid of you." Aria excitedly screamed.

"And that's why I told you not to worry about me when I don't show up to school tomorrow." Ben said looking at me.

"Oh now I know why." I looked at ben.

I forgot to tell Aria what they did to me. I explained the whole thing to her with some details but not all because she doesn't need to her how they did it. After I told her and she understood why Ben and I were looking at each other like that.

Answer 2

Its good !

Answer 3

thx

Answer 4

Love it. Great job.

Answer 5

Awesome