here's a song I wrote a few weeks ago. Lmk what you think. --TRIGGER WARNING:THIS IS A SUICIDE SONG--
I have a damaged soul
wanna cry, wanna die
this stuff is getting so dang old
suicide ain't no lie
17 years old
nobody else to hold
my actions always bold
truth be said truth be told
thoughts in my head
I wanna be dead
I feel like a loser with nothing left
yeah that's what I said
sitting on my bed
thinking bout death
all over again
stay be staring at the ceiling
trying to figure out what i'm feeling
I try to be the realest
but none of you wanna feel it
Alotta thoughts and that's how I flow
alotta pain but thats how I roll
people come and that's when they go
maybe I won't But I wanna fold
you ask how I feel and you want the truth
I wanna be real the things I've been thru
Slowly I'll heal the things I live to do
And thats to care for you
and you ain't even know
always open and closing the door
I really need you whats all the hate for
you always seem to give more
loving ppl is not my sport
I have a damaged soul
wanna cry, wanna die
this stuff is getting so dang old
suicide ain't no lie
17 years old
nobody else to hold
my actions always bold
truth be said truth be told
thoughts in my head
I wanna be dead
I feel like a loser with nothing left
yeah that's what I said
sitting on my bed
thinking bout death
all over again
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here's a song I wrote a few weeks ago. Lmk what you think. --TRIGGER WARNING:THIS IS A SUICIDE SONG--
I have a damaged soul
wanna cry, wanna die
this stuff is getting so dang old
suicide ain't no lie
17 years old
nobody else to hold
my actions always bold
truth be said truth be told
thoughts in my head 
I wanna be dead
I feel like a loser with nothing left
yeah that's what I said
sitting on my bed
thinking bout death
all over again
stay be staring at the ceiling
trying to figure out what i'm feeling
I try to be the realest
but none of you wanna feel it
Alotta thoughts and that's how I flow
alotta pain but thats how I roll
people come and that's when they go
maybe I won't But I wanna fold
you ask how I feel and you want the truth
I wanna be real the things I've been thru
Slowly I'll heal the things I live to do
And thats to care for you
and you ain't even know
always open and closing the door
I really need you whats all the hate for
you always seem to give more
loving ppl is not my sport
I have a damaged soul
wanna cry, wanna die
this stuff is getting so dang old
suicide ain't no lie
17 years old
nobody else to hold
my actions always bold
truth be said truth be told
thoughts in my head 
I wanna be dead
I feel like a loser with nothing left
yeah that's what I said
sitting on my bed
thinking bout death
all over again
_______________________________
Moderators Please Don't Ban Me.
I replaced all potentially bad words

XxIceBearsWifexX · Answer

This is a really nice song/poem and I def can relate to this, but you did pretty good, and if this is about you then I'm sorry you feel this way. <3

QueenBrii · Answer

I really like dis brudda . Yk I got u erry step stay strong and I fw it

sam1235 · Answer

I dont know you but I dont want you to feel this way. Im here for u every step of that way and if u ever wanna talk to someone, you can trust me, i promise

DoubleEncrustedToe · Answer

Sign this man to Atlanta Records

DoubleEncrustedToe · Answer

@doubleencrustedtoe wrote:

Sign this man to Atlanta Records

Atlantic Records*****

SmolPotato · Answer

This really fire bro, people need this in dey life. Not all that fake shii the real shii; the truth and thats what u bring in this song. Man dis is fire bro ngl keep it up. Stay strong and don't never let anyone tell u can't do sum or ill smash they face xD

5172319 · Answer

I feel this. Thxx for posting it. Its really good

Fortish · Answer

Wow love it :)

straightShooter · Answer

Yo this is amazing but you should let me rewrite parts of it so it flows smoother. I got ideas