It took me 4 minutes to write this. Give me feedback please.
"Tears from memories
Her voice a melody
Her touch a remedy
Drowned in hennessy

When she smiles at me
Shocked what's happening
An angel she's gorgeous
Far apart my tears dampening

She tell's me she loves me
She tell's me she wants me
A goddess's words
Her gone leaves me crumbling

Her heart's a diamond
Translucent lights be shining
Her loves exciting
Does she even notice my writing?"

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It took me 4 minutes to write this. Give me feedback please.
"Tears from memories
Her voice a melody
Her touch a remedy
Drowned in hennessy

When she smiles at me
Shocked what's happening
An angel she's gorgeous
Far apart my tears dampening

She tell's me she loves me
She tell's me she wants me
A goddess's words
Her gone leaves me crumbling

Her heart's a diamond
Translucent lights be shining
Her loves exciting
Does she even notice my writing?"

DaRealestVic · Answer

amazingggg.....whoever its about.....a special woman.....keep up the amazing work<33

Echofire · Answer

Looks good. So, what does the "loves exciting" mean?

ItzDanger · Answer

@echofire wrote:

Looks good. So, what does the "loves exciting" mean?

Like her love and affection brings me joy

Echofire · Answer

So her love is exciting, makes sense.

ItzDanger · Answer

@echofire wrote:

So her love is exciting, makes sense.

Yea lol

Aboveusonlysky52 · Answer

damnnnnn dude this is freaking fireeeeee keep going bayani i luh chuu

ItzDanger · Answer

@aboveusonlysky52 wrote:

damnnnnn dude this is freaking fireeeeee keep going bayani i luh chuu

Thank you. Your support fr means alot to me. I luh you too mavvy

Aboveusonlysky52 · Answer

@itzdanger wrote:

@aboveusonlysky52 wrote:

damnnnnn dude this is freaking fireeeeee keep going bayani i luh chuu

Thank you. Your support fr means alot to me. I luh you too mavvy

chu welcome

Nishia134 · Answer

Good job baby keep up the good work Love you

BrokenAngel07 · Answer

this is really good, I love all the things you write, love you n look forward to seeing all the other things you put up<3

xxemilianaxx · Answer

I'm ngl it hit me hard 😂 I can understand it and it's really good

ItzDanger · Answer

@brokenangel07 wrote:

this is really good, I love all the things you write, love you n look forward to seeing all the other things you put up<3

Thank you for your support winter. I fr appreciate u alot. I luh u-bayani

ItzDanger · Answer

@xxemilianaxx wrote:

I'm ngl it hit me hard 😂 I can understand it and it's really good

Thank you milly. This means alot to me.

BrokenAngel07 · Answer

@itzdanger wrote:

@brokenangel07 wrote:

this is really good, I love all the things you write, love you n look forward to seeing all the other things you put up<3

Thank you for your support winter. I fr appreciate u alot. I luh u-bayani

mhm yk me imma always be here for you, luh u more<3

Astrid1 · Answer

This is really good. You put a lot of detail into this and casted your emotion and perspective quite well.

forgetmylife · Answer

Gang dis good asl keep it up i understood every single word and detail im here for u remember dat ride an die cuzzo💉🩸

ItzDanger · Answer

@nishia134 wrote:

Good job baby keep up the good work Love you

Thanks luv. I appreciate chu frfr. Love you too

ItzDanger · Answer

@astrid1 wrote:

This is really good. You put a lot of detail into this and casted your emotion and perspective quite well.

Thank you astrid for your support. It fr took 4 minutes. If i spent an hour it woulda been way better. Thank u

ItzDanger · Answer

@forgetmylife wrote:

Gang dis good asl keep it up i understood every single word and detail im here for u remember dat ride an die cuzzo💉🩸

Thanks gang. I preciate chu. Im here fo u too. Luh you cuzzo.💉🩸

forgetmylife · Answer

@itzdanger wrote:

@forgetmylife wrote:

Gang dis good asl keep it up i understood every single word and detail im here for u remember dat ride an die cuzzo💉🩸

Thanks gang. I preciate chu. Im here fo u too. Luh you cuzzo.💉🩸

Luh you too cuzzo

forgetmylife · Answer

🖤

ItzDanger · Answer

@forgetmylife wrote:

🖤

Fortish · Answer

Amazin, keep it up!

ItzDanger · Answer

@fortish wrote:

Amazin, keep it up!

Thanks bro

Fortish · Answer

Yw :)