Question

Made a weird rap thing

Kalydeco
Lets get on the flow
Go in the garden shed and get the hoe
You still have to let it grow
Let's go swimming in the snow
Why is you walkin so slow
I lied to Edgar Allan Poe
Nobody asked you if you wanted Dominoes
So go sit in the corner, you monkey with camel toe.

Answer 1

the first parts good, but you dont have any room in it to breath if you get what i mean like, uhm like put another sentence in between the rhymes, so it will have a better ring to it, or else it will make it sound weird, and the like it feels like there are too many rhymes. thats hard to explain but yeah. and the rap should flow together, and all go well with each other, they should match, like all be about the same thing if you catch my drift, the first 3 sentences i liked, it was alright.

Answer 2

Oh thanks for the adive :D