what do you think of my poem so far? please let me know if there's anything I should fix.

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Beccaaaa · Answer

The instructor said,

Go home and write 
a page tonight. 
And let that page come out of you– 
Then, it will be true.

The sound of snoring wakes me up,
It’s alright, it's just my pup.
Listening to my music, singing all night,
About how it’s going to be alright.

Hunting deer, catching fish, 
No need to make a wish. 
Hanging out with family and reading,
Is just the way I wanna be spending the evening.

Beccaaaa · Answer

it's not finished yet. it's gotta be 36 lines. but this is what I have so far.

AspenK · Answer

its really good keep up the good work

Beccaaaa · Answer

thank you. is there anything you recommend

@aspenk wrote:

its really good keep up the good work

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AspenK · Answer

maybe be a bit carfree a little more i love poems and even wrote a couple myself when i was younger

Beccaaaa · Answer

@aspenk wrote:

maybe be a bit carfree a little more i love poems and even wrote a couple myself when i was younger

nice and ok thank you this helps

AspenK · Answer

yw

karissafrazier · Answer

i only skimmed it as i'm too ipset to read it fully rn-sorry- but it looks good

Beccaaaa · Answer

oh ok. ty hope you feel better soon <3

uniqueislove · Answer

I love your poem so much. It is so good. I mean wow!!

Beccaaaa · Answer

Thank you

uniqueislove · Answer

@beccaaaa wrote:

Thank you

Of courseeeeeeee

b1az34 · Answer

it looks ok not great but ok