I do want to know what I should change in this writing. If you could give feedback, that would be great.

Sometimes all I know is what's in front of me, all I feel is what happened to me the minute before. I do know dreams take a while to achieve, but trying to live up to the expectations is..well, it is a lot. A lot to process, much to handle. The stress of trying to make everyone happy is a lot. Too much, perhaps. It's sad and it's annoying how much I fail at what I try so hard at. What I wish could happen. I get sad and frustrated when I try to live up to their expectations..yet I fail. I fail to do what I love doing. I fail to make them proud. I won't give up, not ever. Not as long as I can try. I won't fail to make them proud. Not ever. But that doesn't mean I won't fail in succeeding.

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I do want to know what I should change in this writing. If you could give feedback, that would be great.

Sometimes all I know is what's in front of me, all I feel is what happened to me the minute before. I do know dreams take a while to achieve, but trying to live up to the expectations is..well, it is a lot. A lot to process, much to handle. The stress of trying to make everyone happy is a lot. Too much, perhaps. It's sad and it's annoying how much I fail at what I try so hard at. What I wish could happen. I get sad and frustrated when I try to live up to their expectations..yet I fail. I fail to do what I love doing. I fail to make them proud. I won't give up, not ever. Not as long as I can try. I won't fail to make them proud. Not ever. But that doesn't mean I won't fail in succeeding.

SatanBunneh · Answer

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iAmTsUkKi · Answer

uh...i don't really see what needs to be changed.

lovinggabsxx · Answer

I feel like you’re shoving all one subject into one writing. Like I know people write for only one subject but maybe space it out.