Well, I uhm wanted to share some details about my partner.. It's not a poem, but its the way I feel about a certain someone. {((I want feedback please))}

I love my partner so much. She makes me want to change, to be a better person.When i'm with her, i don't think about my past, but my future with her. I am so happy that shes in my life; she never quits and keeps trying her best to keep me happy. I'll follow you into the dark through any obstacle at least I can do that much. You're not just my partner, you're my best friend. And I really do appreciate the the things that you do for me, it makes me feel like the luckiest person in the world. I don't want to lose you; now or in the future. I hope our love stays strong for the rest of our young lives

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Well, I uhm wanted to share some details about my partner.. It's not a poem, but its the way I feel about a certain someone. {((I want feedback please))}

I love my partner so much. She makes me want to change, to be a better person.When i'm with her, i don't think about my past, but my future with her. I am so happy that shes in my life; she never quits and keeps trying her best to keep me happy. I'll follow you into the dark through any obstacle at least I can do that much. You're not just my partner, you're my best friend. And I really do appreciate the the things that you do for me, it makes me feel like the luckiest person in the world. I don't want to lose you; now or in the future. I hope our love stays strong for the rest of our young lives

Shadow · Answer

What kind of feedback do you want? @deadofwinter

euphoriiic · Answer

AWHHHH!!! THATS SO SWEET...IM GONNA CRYYY!!

QuestionCoveBot · Answer

I’ll just copy this and save it for later.. it’s beautiful. ❤️

DeadOfWinter · Answer

Thank you guys, so much!

DeadOfWinter · Answer

@shadow wrote:

What kind of feedback do you want? @deadofwinter

I just want to know if my punctuation is correct or whatnot. And what words I should've used.

P1n3appl31 · Answer

WHOOOO LETS GO BEST FRIEND :>

DeadOfWinter · Answer

@euphoriiic wrote:

AWHHHH!!! THATS SO SWEET...IM GONNA CRYYY!!

Tears of joy I hope!

DeadOfWinter · Answer

@questioncovebot wrote:

I’ll just copy this and save it for later.. it’s beautiful. ❤️

I- Legit speeclless hun!!

DeadOfWinter · Answer

@p1n3appl31 wrote:

WHOOOO LETS GO BEST FRIEND :>

WOHOO Thank you bestieeeeeeeeee!!!!

euphoriiic · Answer

@deadofwinter wrote:

@euphoriiic wrote:

AWHHHH!!! THATS SO SWEET...IM GONNA CRYYY!!

Tears of joy I hope!

Fr tears of joyy, that was the most adorable thing i've ever read

P1n3appl31 · Answer

@euphoriiic wrote:

@deadofwinter wrote:

@euphoriiic wrote:

AWHHHH!!! THATS SO SWEET...IM GONNA CRYYY!!

Tears of joy I hope!

Fr tears of joyy, that was the most adorable thing i've ever read

I literally just read the definition of a romantic partner c:

euphoriiic · Answer

@p1n3appl31 wrote:

@euphoriiic wrote:

@deadofwinter wrote:

@euphoriiic wrote:

AWHHHH!!! THATS SO SWEET...IM GONNA CRYYY!!

Tears of joy I hope!

Fr tears of joyy, that was the most adorable thing i've ever read

I literally just read the definition of a romantic partner c:

frfrrr

Abbygracem · Answer

omg that's the sweetest thing ever!

Shadow · Answer

@deadofwinter wrote:

@shadow wrote:

What kind of feedback do you want? @deadofwinter

I just want to know if my punctuation is correct or whatnot. And what words I should've used.

In that case, I can take it sentence by sentence. Note that brackets [] introduce corrections. "I love my partner so much." -As you read and continue writing, you may find new ways of expressing high forms of degree. This is usually via figurative language, such as: "I love my partner as the flower adores the sun," a simile construction. She makes me want to change, to be a better person.[Space]When [Capitalize]i'm with her, [Capitalize]i don't think about my past, but my future with her. I am so happy that shes in my life; she never quits and keeps trying her best to keep me happy. -She's is a contraction of she is. So make sure to put the apostrophe in there, this -> '. If you don't know if it belongs there or not, always ask if it's a contraction (a shortened form of two words). I'll follow you into the dark through any obstacle[,] at least I can do that much. -Here 'at least' begins a new clause, it helps to provide a pause in the form of a comma. You're not just my partner, you're my best friend. And I really do appreciate the the things that you do for me, it makes me feel like the luckiest person in the world. I don't want to lose you; now or in the future. I hope our love stays strong for the rest of our young lives Everything else looks fine. It's always nice to put your work out there and be open to improving, after all, it's the only way you get better :p More reading and writing definitely do help though, so I wish you best of luck on your journey, of both writing, and love.

MaxTon · Answer

its very sweet kid.

DreamQueen · Answer

Nice poem

fro28rub · Answer

Cool. Make sure to add comas, capitalize letters, and use some synonyms for some repeated words! <3

SatanicDevil · Answer

Nice.

MidniteSunny · Answer

I thought it was very sweet! Gud job in expressing ur feelings m8. It seems like any edit to it has been said already, but I do have one thing. The shift from saying "she" to "you" threw me off a tad bit. Other than that, super duper lovely ^^

divorceddad · Answer

is this homework..

girhatz · Answer

the awnser is $$9x \div 89=y$$

JazzWill · Answer

that is absolutely beautiful

Taters · Answer

That is very lovely. Right, @toocoolnot?

TooCoolNot · Answer

Yeee! I love it!

ILoveMyBoyfriend · Answer

I LOVE it!

IrinaVal66 · Answer

i love it. it is just so unique, i love how u made it about your partner. Thats so sweet. U never disappoint me with ur kind-ness

BarbieJoo · Answer

I love the whole thing, the person your with must be really lucky to have someone like you who rights them sweet paragraphs like this

Emma1234 · Answer

I love it, its so cuteee. I wish someone told me that but shes going to love it!!! You did amazing hunn

KingCooper713 · Answer

i like it a lot

IfOceansEchoed · Answer

Your partner better appreciate it

IfOceansEchoed · Answer

Cause we sure do

SatanicDevil · Answer

Oof, only if I knew..

DeadOfWinter · Answer

..Sigh..