Question

wrote a short what do yall think
I begin to regain consciousness, sitting up from my laying down position. But where am I? I look around hoping to see something familiar but all around me there are only doors and hallways, where am I? “Hello?” I say hoping to get an answer, silence fills the air “guess I’m on my own” I whisper to myself the door on my right begins to glow “what the” I begin but before I can finish I am sucked into the door.
Brightness blinds my eyes as I’m pulled into the door “ahh” I wince with pain the brightness beings to fade and I see something… more like someone the blurriness begins to fade and Michele comes into view “Michele” I say joy washing over me someone is standing next to him its… it's me “Bella?” Michele says with a husky voice “yes darling” the other me says “Promise me we’ll be together forever” he says kissing my forehead “I promise” the other me whispers Tears sting my eyes “some promises can’t be kept my love” I whisper tears streaming down my face the brightness comes back as I’m sucked out of the memory
and again I am where I was before in a hallway with many doors I fall to the ground down on all fours tears flooding from out of my eyes falling down on to the beige carpet making it turn greyish “why… would you show me that” i ask the room “WHY!… WHY!” I scream I can feel my face turning red

Answer 1

It's really really good. I suggest writing more to it, making a full story instead of just a short.

Answer 2

its cool, kinda don't understand it tho, like who is michele? Maybe before you post it explain the charicters and their traits. good job though keep up the good work! <3