hey everyone i was making a song and i was wondering should i post it

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DeLuvBella · Answer

yea u should

n32carrillo · Answer

obviously bro go for it

bravosix · Answer

@n32carrillo wrote:

obviously bro go for it

ok i will writing it out now

bravosix · Answer

My heart is weak
Tear it down piece by piece
Leave me to think
Deep in my structure, I think I still love her
But I need some sleep

bravosix · Answer

thats verse one let me know what you guys think

DeLuvBella · Answer

I think its really good    in my opinion I think u should Tear it down piece by piece  change this to    torn down  piece by piece     but u do whatever sounds best to u

bravosix · Answer

heres the pre chorus

You've taken my breath away
Now I want to breathe
'Cause I cannot see, what you can see
So easily

DeLuvBella · Answer

its all good im not tryna  make u chance  a bunch of stuff  but I think u should change now I want to breathe to  now I need to breathe

bravosix · Answer

@deluvbella wrote:

its all good im not tryna make u chance a bunch of stuff but I think u should change now I want to breathe to now I need to breathe

your all good your just giving constructive criticism

DeLuvBella · Answer

@bravosix wrote:

@deluvbella wrote:

its all good im not tryna make u chance a bunch of stuff but I think u should change now I want to breathe to now I need to breathe

your all good your just giving constructive criticism

do u got anymore

bravosix · Answer

@deluvbella wrote:

@bravosix wrote:

@deluvbella wrote:

its all good im not tryna make u chance a bunch of stuff but I think u should change now I want to breathe to now I need to breathe

your all good your just giving constructive criticism

do u got anymore

yes i got more

DeLuvBella · Answer

@bravosix wrote:

@deluvbella wrote:

@bravosix wrote:

@deluvbella wrote:

its all good im not tryna make u chance a bunch of stuff but I think u should change now I want to breathe to now I need to breathe

your all good your just giving constructive criticism

do u got anymore

yes i got more

ok

bravosix · Answer

I thought my demons were almost defeated
But you took their side and you pulled them to freedom
I kept your secrets and I thought that you would do the same

DeLuvBella · Answer

@bravosix wrote:

I thought my demons were almost defeated But you took their side and you pulled them to freedom I kept your secrets and I thought that you would do the same

I kept your secrets and I thought that you would do the same ( I think it would sound better if u said I kept your secrets and I thought you'd keep mine

OLIVER69 · Answer

Baby people will always love to look at some lyrics. Music is an escape for people, so yeah.