hey everyone i wasnt gonna post what i have of my story so far but a good friend of mine @strawberrygoddess told me that i should so here it is i hope yall like it please let me know what yall think.

My life as a criminal

A story by bravo six

The year was 2045 and I had just graduated from college. Everything was going good for me until my mother was diagnosed with stage 3 lung cancer. I turned to a life of crime and anarchy, this is my story.

(Beep, Beep, Beep), I smack my alarm clock as I sit up and stretch. ¨God, that was a crazy graduation party last night,¨ I think to myself. I scratch the back of my head as I walk into the bathroom and start the shower. I walk out of the bathroom after my shower and grab some clothes and get dressed. I finished getting dressed and walked out the door, I start walking down the street to my favorite coffee shop. I open the door, (bell rings), good morning the barista yells out. I reply back, “good morning.¨ I walk up to the counter and start looking at the menu, ¨what do i want today¨ I think to myself as I wait for the barista. Five minutes later the barista walks up to the counter, ¨how can i help you today” he says. “i´ll just take a black coffee with two tablespoons of sugar,” I reply as i yawn.
Ten minutes later the barista calls my number, ¨number 45, black coffee with two sugars he yells,¨ I walk up to the counter and pay for the coffee and i walk out the door. As I walk down the street my phone rings. (Ring, Ring,RIng) I take my phone out of my pocket and I look at the screen, ¨wait why is the hospital calling me¨ i think to my self. I answer the phone, hello, ¨hello is this dovahkiin¨ the doctor says, ¨yes this is him¨ i reply, how can i help you, ¨yes umm we have you mother ms donovin here with us she collapsed just outside of her house at first we thought it was an asthma attack but we did some tests and it turns out that you mother has stage three lung cancer, there is an operation that would help her but it is really costly and your insurance doesn't cover it,¨ the doctor explains. I immediately hang up the phone and break down into tears.
I get back to my house after receiving the news, and in a fit of rage I trash my apartment not caring about anything. Fifteen to thirty minutes later im sitting in the middle of all of the mess. I slowly start to stand up as i walk to my closet, the only thing that wasn't destroyed, I open up the closet and pull out three giant casses.

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hey everyone i wasnt gonna post what i have of my story so far but a good friend of mine @strawberrygoddess told me that i should so here it is i hope yall like it please let me know what yall think.

My life as a criminal

A story by bravo six

The year was 2045 and I had just graduated from college. Everything was going good for me until my mother was diagnosed with stage 3 lung cancer. I turned to a life of crime and anarchy, this is my story.

(Beep, Beep, Beep), I smack my alarm clock as I sit up and stretch. ¨God, that was a crazy graduation party last night,¨ I think to myself. I scratch the back of my head as I walk into the bathroom and start the shower. I walk out of the bathroom after my shower and grab some clothes and get dressed. I finished getting dressed and walked out the door, I start walking down the street to my favorite coffee shop. I open the door, (bell rings), good morning the barista yells out. I reply back, “good morning.¨ I walk up to the counter and start looking at the menu, ¨what do i want today¨ I think to myself as I wait for the barista. Five minutes later the barista walks up to the counter, ¨how can i help you today” he says. “i´ll just take a black coffee with two tablespoons of sugar,” I reply as i yawn.
	Ten minutes later the barista calls my number, ¨number 45, black coffee with two sugars he yells,¨ I walk up to the counter and pay for the coffee and i walk out the door. As I walk down the street my phone rings. (Ring, Ring,RIng)  I take my phone out of my pocket and I look at the screen, ¨wait why is the hospital calling me¨ i think to my self. I answer the phone, hello, ¨hello is this dovahkiin¨ the doctor says, ¨yes this is him¨ i reply, how can i help you, ¨yes umm we have you mother ms donovin here with us she collapsed just outside of her house at first we thought it was an asthma attack but we did some tests and it turns out that you mother has stage three lung cancer, there is an operation that would help her but it is really costly and your insurance doesn't cover it,¨ the doctor explains. I immediately hang up the phone and break down into tears.
	I get back to my house after receiving the news, and in a fit of rage I trash my apartment not caring about anything. Fifteen to thirty minutes later im sitting in the middle of all of the mess. I slowly start to stand up as i walk to my closet, the only thing that wasn't destroyed, I open up the closet and pull out three giant casses.

StrawberryGoddess · Answer

I WOVE IT!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

bravosix · Answer

@strawberrygoddess wrote:

I WOVE IT!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

thank you

bravosix · Answer

also i huge shoutout to @justbenice for helping me with the grammer and spelling, she is and was a huge help in creating what ive got so far.

EmoKid4EVer · Answer

Wow. This is a good story. Really hope you make more. I want to see what happens next.

Yuk1 · Answer

it's really good, but maybe add some more details, to things. also just personally that man has the most bland taste in coffee XD

StrawberryGoddess · Answer

@emokid4ever wrote:

Wow. This is a good story. Really hope you make more. I want to see what happens next.

ME TOO I WANNA SEE WHAT HAPPENS NEXTTT!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

bravosix · Answer

@emokid4ever wrote:

Wow. This is a good story. Really hope you make more. I want to see what happens next.

yeah im still working on it i just started like an hour or 2 ago

bravosix · Answer

@yuk1 wrote:

it's really good, but maybe add some more details, to things. also just personally that man has the most bland taste in coffee XD

lol

StrawberryGoddess · Answer

@strawberrygoddess wrote:

@emokid4ever wrote:

Wow. This is a good story. Really hope you make more. I want to see what happens next.

ME TOO I WANNA SEE WHAT HAPPENS NEXTTT!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

sorry all caps TT^TT

bravosix · Answer

its all good 
your just excited

Yuk1 · Answer

i don't like black coffee. it's bitter and bland-

bravosix · Answer

irl i prefer black coffee

Yuk1 · Answer

i don't

bravosix · Answer

im almost done a section of chapter three yall wanna see

bravosix · Answer

@yuk1 and @strawberrygoddess  do yall wanna see part of chapter 3

StrawberryGoddess · Answer

@bravosix wrote:

@yuk1 and @strawberrygoddess do yall wanna see part of chapter 3

YESSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSS

bravosix · Answer

you got it

bravosix · Answer

here is what i have of chapter 3

I get back to my house after receiving the news, and in a fit of rage I trash my apartment not caring about anything. Fifteen to thirty minutes later im sitting in the middle of all of the mess. I slowly start to stand up as i walk to my closet, the only thing that wasn't destroyed, I open up the closet and pull out three giant casses. I lay the casses out side by side along the trim of the wall. I open up the casses and start pulling out fire arm after fire arm.

StrawberryGoddess · Answer

@bravosix wrote:

here is what i have of chapter 3 I get back to my house after receiving the news, and in a fit of rage I trash my apartment not caring about anything. Fifteen to thirty minutes later im sitting in the middle of all of the mess. I slowly start to stand up as i walk to my closet, the only thing that wasn't destroyed, I open up the closet and pull out three giant casses. I lay the casses out side by side along the trim of the wall. I open up the casses and start pulling out fire arm after fire arm.

I F UCKING LOVE IT!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

bravosix · Answer

@strawberrygoddess wrote:

@bravosix wrote:

here is what i have of chapter 3 I get back to my house after receiving the news, and in a fit of rage I trash my apartment not caring about anything. Fifteen to thirty minutes later im sitting in the middle of all of the mess. I slowly start to stand up as i walk to my closet, the only thing that wasn't destroyed, I open up the closet and pull out three giant casses. I lay the casses out side by side along the trim of the wall. I open up the casses and start pulling out fire arm after fire arm.

I F UCKING LOVE IT!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

thank you so much and again im still working on it so i still have a lot to do

kpopidol2010 · Answer

It Is so good i cannot wait to see what happens next and keep up the good work you are incredibly awesome and never stop doing what you love < 3

bravosix · Answer

@kpopidol2010 wrote:

It Is so good i cannot wait to see what happens next and keep up the good work you are incredibly awesome and never stop doing what you love < 3

thank you so much

kpopidol2010 · Answer

yea you are so welcome i wish i could do something like that but i am not that talented lmao but anyways i love it and i wish you the best of luck <3

bravosix · Answer

@kpopidol2010 wrote:

yea you are so welcome i wish i could do something like that but i am not that talented lmao but anyways i love it and i wish you the best of luck <3

never doubt your self there is always somting that you will be good at,

kpopidol2010 · Answer

alright thank you so much for the advice i will think of it all the time

Yuk1 · Answer

it's really good!

bravosix · Answer

@kpopidol2010 wrote:

alright thank you so much for the advice i will think of it all the time

your welcome

bravosix · Answer

@yuk1 wrote:

it's really good!

thank you so much

bravosix · Answer

and thank you to everyone for the support

snowie · Answer

amazing, how are u so good at this?

OLIVER69 · Answer

Baby I want more of this. I want to know what happens next. i've never wanted to read a story so badly before. You got me hooked and I need more. It's so good