good morning everyone so i just realised that ive been calling each paragraph a chapter, so i actually only have part of chapter one done here it is let me know what you think.

(Beep, Beep, Beep), I smack my alarm clock as I sit up and stretch. ¨God, that was a crazy graduation party last night,¨ I think to myself. I scratch the back of my head as I walk into the bathroom and start the shower. I walk out of the bathroom after my shower and grab some clothes and get dressed. I finished getting dressed and walked out the door, I start walking down the street to my favorite coffee shop. I open the door, (bell rings), good morning the barista yells out. I reply back, “good morning.¨ I walk up to the counter and start looking at the menu, ¨what do i want today¨ I think to myself as I wait for the barista. Five minutes later the barista walks up to the counter, ¨how can I help you today?” he says. “I´ll just take a black coffee with two tablespoons of sugar,” I reply as I yawn.
Ten minutes later the barista calls my number, ¨number 45, black coffee with two sugars,” he yells. I walk up to the counter and pay for the coffee and I walk out the door. As I walk down the street my phone rings. (Ring, Ring,Ring) I take my phone out of my pocket and look at the screen, “wait, why is the hospital calling me?¨ I think to myself. I answer the phone, hello, ¨Hello is this Dovahkiin¨ the doctor asks, ¨yes this is him¨ I reply, how can I help you, ¨yes umm we have you mother Ms. Donovin here with us. She collapsed just outside of her house. At first we thought it was an asthma attack, but we did some tests and it turns out that your mother has stage three lung cancer. There is an operation that would help her but it is really costly and your insurance doesn't cover it,¨ the doctor explains. I immediately hang up the phone and break down into tears.
I get back to my house after receiving the news, and in a fit of rage I trash my apartment, not caring about anything. Fifteen to thirty minutes later I'm sitting in the middle of all of the mess. I slowly start to stand up as I walk to my closet, the only thing that wasn't destroyed, I open up the closet and pull out three giant cases. I lay the cases out side by side along the trim of the wall. I open up the cases and start pulling out firearm after firearm. I take out and lay out all the firearms, “I could supply a small army,¨ I think to myself. I start taking apart each gun and cleaning them then putting them back

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good morning everyone so i just realised that ive been calling each paragraph a chapter, so i actually only have part of chapter one done here it is let me know what you think.

(Beep, Beep, Beep), I smack my alarm clock as I sit up and stretch. ¨God, that was a crazy graduation party last night,¨ I think to myself. I scratch the back of my head as I walk into the bathroom and start the shower. I walk out of the bathroom after my shower and grab some clothes and get dressed. I finished getting dressed and walked out the door, I start walking down the street to my favorite coffee shop. I open the door, (bell rings), good morning the barista yells out. I reply back, “good morning.¨ I walk up to the counter and start looking at the menu, ¨what do i want today¨ I think to myself as I wait for the barista. Five minutes later the barista walks up to the counter, ¨how can I help you today?” he says. “I´ll just take a black coffee with two tablespoons of sugar,” I reply as I yawn.
	Ten minutes later the barista calls my number, ¨number 45, black coffee with two sugars,” he yells. I walk up to the counter and pay for the coffee and I walk out the door. As I walk down the street my phone rings. (Ring, Ring,Ring)  I take my phone out of my pocket and look at the screen, “wait, why is the hospital calling me?¨ I think to myself. I answer the phone, hello, ¨Hello is this Dovahkiin¨ the doctor asks, ¨yes this is him¨ I reply, how can I help you, ¨yes umm we have you mother Ms. Donovin here with us. She collapsed just outside of her house. At first we thought it was an asthma attack, but we did some tests and it turns out that your mother has stage three lung cancer. There is an operation that would help her but it is really costly and your insurance doesn't cover it,¨ the doctor explains. I immediately hang up the phone and break down into tears.
	I get back to my house after receiving the news, and in a fit of rage I trash my apartment, not caring about anything. Fifteen to thirty minutes later I'm sitting in the middle of all of the mess. I slowly start to stand up as I walk to my closet, the only thing that wasn't destroyed, I open up the closet and pull out three giant cases. I lay the cases out side by side along the trim of the wall. I open up the cases and start pulling out firearm after firearm. I take out and lay out all the firearms, “I could supply a small army,¨ I think to myself. I start taking apart each gun and cleaning them then putting them back

bravosix · Answer

together. Just as im putting the guns back into the cases i hear a knock at the door and nobody ever visits me, ¨so i start to think to my self¨ who's there. I go to reach for the gun my hand shaking, i grab the fire arm and aim it at the front door, slowly i walk towards the door, suddenly the door opens and i fire three shots back to back.
	¨thud¨ thats all i heard as i watched his body hit the ground. ¨D-did i really just do this, did i really just shoot and kill a cop¨ i think to my self. As im dragging his body into my apartment i look through his possessions, all i could find was his car keys and a wallet, i take the keys and wallet off of him and put it on my table. ¨why¨ i think to my self as im sitting at the table thinking what about what i should do with the body. Fifteen minutes later im asleep at the table. All the sudden i jolt up out of my sleep to the sound of swat coming up the stairs. I rush over to the cases and pack them up and put them all into a duffle bag throw it over my back and jump out of the window next to my bed which is three stories in the air and land into a garbage can. I get up as soon as possible and start running as fast as i can. Thirty minutes later i´ve lost the swat team and i've made it to the forest line.

bravosix · Answer

hope yall like it

EmoKid4EVer · Answer

OMG. This chapter has made the story even better with the cops and SWAT chasting after her.

ShoaibChaudhry · Answer

XD Have u ever thought about making a book?

bravosix · Answer

@shoaibchaudhry wrote:

XD Have u ever thought about making a book?

no i havent

bravosix · Answer

tbh i havent thoguht about writing a book i was just doing this in my free time with the help and suppor of @justbenice

snowie · Answer

amazing keep up the hard work

OLIVER69 · Answer

Holy Sweet Jesus. Can I have more? IT'S SO GOOD. AHHHHH... GIMME MORE