Question

Tell me what you guys think of my story.

Answer 1

It was a brisk, fall night. Leo was was walking down the street, heading home after a long day of working hard. He never liked walking home on his own. It was strange and terrifying at night where he lived. He jumped when he heard a movement from the bushes. He walked quickly to his house and locked the doors. He went upstairs, he took his shirt off, when he heard a window break. He went to his closet, grabbed a bat and walked downstairs. Leo was terrified. He saw the broken glass and saw muddy footprints just outside his door. There was a hall closet from his back door into the kitchen. He thought the person might be in there, so he quickly opened the door, but when he did, someone came up behind him and covered his mouth with a rag. Leo passed out.

About fifteen minutes later, Leo woke up with water dripping from his face. He tried to move but he figured out he was tied down to the chair. He looked around where he was and saw that he was in his basement. He didn't see anyone, but there was one spot of the basement in which it was very dark. A faint, but deep voice called out from the shadows. "Hey there, Leo". All he was thinking was, "How did he know my name?". Leo kept asking himself this question until finally, Leo said, "Who are you?!". The person stepped out from the shadows and had a black mask on. The person said, "I am your stalker, I've watched you every day since first grade, I wanted to talk to you and kiss you, but I was to afraid of my dad and what others think."

Leo was shocked. He didn't think of that as a response to his question. Leo had one more question. "What's your name?". He responded, "My name is Enzo." Leo didn't remember him. He wanted too, but couldn't. Enzo said, "You may not remember me, but I never forgot you, I was obsessed with you." Leo felt bad, but at the same time, relieved. Leo knew if he was obsessed with him, then Enzo wouldn't hurt him, he was correct. Leo was very good at untying knots. He managed to untie the ropes as Enzo got close to him, but instead of running, Leo stayed. Enzo lifted up a small part of his mask for him to only see his mouth. Enzo took Leo's face in his hands, pulled him closer and kissed Leo. Enzo stepped back and said, "I've been waiting for that kiss forever". Enzo saw that Leo had untied himself. "Why haven't you ran, yet?". Leo realized that he knew.

Enzo pulled his mask down and stepped back into the dark corner. Leo stood up and right before he went to go upstairs said, "I'll see you again." Enzo was confused and closed his eyes. When he opened his eyes, he wasn't in the basement, instead he was in the halls of his elementary school.

Answer 2

Not finished yet, obvi.

Answer 3

its really good

Answer 4

i like it

Answer 5

its good i like it keep up the good work ! <3

Answer 6

its good, nice work

Answer 7

nice job like it

Answer 8

I can barely write a decent paragraph

Answer 9

This is very good, you guys who write stories have such a creative mind I love it. Keep up the good work and can you @ me when it's complete? I would love to read the full story!