So, in English we have to redo Romeo and Juliet of a 20 page scene. So, this is what I did so far

Lady Capulet: Juliet!
Nurse: Juliet is still sleeping, I think we should leave her alone
Lady Capulet: No wake her up nurse we need to talk about something important
Nurse: Yes Lady Capulet will do.
Lady Capulet: Ok thank you nurse let me know when she is ready
(Exuent Lady Capulet)
Nurse: Juliet wake up your mother needs you
Juliet: Ugh nurse can’t you see I am trying to sleep?
Nurse: Yes dear, I can but your mother had me wake you up so you two can talk
Juliet: Ok I will be there in a minute I need to get ready
(Exuent Nurse)
Juliet: I wish Romeo were here, he would know what to do about the whole situation
(Knock on door)
Juliet:Yes?
Lady Capulet: Juliet we need to talk
Juliet: Yes, mother
Lady Capulet: I heard you like a Montague
Juliet: Yes mother that is correct
Lady Capulet: That is disgusting, Juliet you cannot like the enemy
Juliet: Yes I know mother
Lady Capulet: As long as you are in my house you will not be liking a Montague

How did I do? Any advice on to make it better? Or how it looks so far?

Question

So, in English we have to redo Romeo and Juliet of a 20 page scene. So, this is what I did so far

Lady Capulet: Juliet!
Nurse: Juliet is still sleeping, I think we should leave her alone 
Lady Capulet: No wake her up nurse we need to talk about something important
Nurse: Yes Lady Capulet will do.
Lady Capulet: Ok thank you nurse let me know when she is ready
(Exuent Lady Capulet)
Nurse: Juliet wake up your mother needs you
Juliet: Ugh nurse can’t you see I am trying to sleep?
Nurse: Yes dear, I can but your mother had me wake you up so you two can talk
Juliet: Ok I will be there in a minute I need to get ready
(Exuent Nurse)
Juliet: I wish Romeo were here, he would know what to do about the whole situation
(Knock on door)
Juliet:Yes?
Lady Capulet: Juliet we need to talk
Juliet: Yes, mother
Lady Capulet: I heard you like a Montague
Juliet: Yes mother that is correct
Lady Capulet: That is disgusting, Juliet you cannot like the enemy
Juliet: Yes I know mother
Lady Capulet: As long as you are in my house you will not be liking a Montague

How did I do? Any advice on to make it better? Or how it looks so far?

IsabelFriedmannbells · Answer

i read that in 9th grade lol

IsabelFriedmannbells · Answer

it looks good and sounds good

JordynTheAlien · Answer

@isabelfriedmannbells wrote:

i read that in 9th grade lol

I am in 9th grade. But I also HAVE to get an A

JordynTheAlien · Answer

@isabelfriedmannbells wrote:

it looks good and sounds good

Thanks, anything else I need to fix?

IsabelFriedmannbells · Answer

@jordynthealien wrote:

@isabelfriedmannbells wrote:

it looks good and sounds good

Thanks, anything else I need to fix?

nope, it looks guud 2 me

JordynTheAlien · Answer

@isabelfriedmannbells wrote:

@jordynthealien wrote:

@isabelfriedmannbells wrote:

it looks good and sounds good

Thanks, anything else I need to fix?

nope, it looks guud 2 me

Ight

NotLeiland · Answer

You also might want to include the part where Romeo kills Tybalt and is exiled. That's a big factor in the story because if he hadn't killed Tybalt, he wouldn't have been banished and he would have been able to stay with Juliet.

JordynTheAlien · Answer

@notleiland wrote:

You also might want to include the part where Romeo kills Tybalt and is exiled. That's a big factor in the story because if he hadn't killed Tybalt, he wouldn't have been banished and he would have been able to stay with Juliet.

That is another act. I only get 1 act.

LillPerson · Answer

This is GOOD. keep the good work up

JordynTheAlien · Answer

@lillperson wrote:

This is GOOD. keep the good work up

Thanks!

DeadOfWinter · Answer

Oh~ Romeo romeo~

DeadOfWinter · Answer

Oh, juliet juliet {echo} ehbjnef

APVX · Answer

Good Job

lovinggabsxx · Answer

Did better than me!

K1NGofPadlet · Answer

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