Question

Finished Chapter three of my story: also you can find the rest of my story in the link or on my profile.

https://www.wattpad.com/story/333937067-love-is-forbidden

Answer 1

Chapter 3:
As the sun rose over the horizon and I peered through the window, I woke up with a warm embrace. As I opened my eyes, smiled and saw that Axton had already got up to cook breakfast. I could smell an exquisite aroma coming from the kitchen. I walked to the kitchen holding Caleb's hand. Axton had set the table with three plates and delicious food on them. I looked at the plates; one didn't have sausages, so I sat down there. Caleb sat down to my right and then Axton sat down to my left. We finish our food and I look at my phone. "Cookie, I need to get to work." I kiss Axton and I say goodbye to Caleb. I grab my keys and head out the door. I lock the door and I start running to work. I calmly walk inside and sit at my desk and start working. Hours and hours go by and I feel exhausted. I walk back home after a long day at work when I hear older Caleb saying, "RUN, DAD!"

I run so fast that older Caleb disappears, but I trip and fall. I get up and look up. I look all around me and realize I ran so fast that I ran out of the force field that closed our town. I try to go back in and I fall on my face. I run back to my house and I run to Axton. I jumped into his arms and hugged him. He was a little confused, but he had a smile on his face. "We can get out of here, Axton. I made it out, but I came back for you guys." Caleb came running and hugged us. I knelt down and took Caleb by the hand. "How would you like to go to other places, instead of staying in this town?" Caleb jumped up and down. "Yay, let's go." I laughed. "Hold on now Caleb." I looked back at Axton and his face had an expression of confusion on it. I told him that I got out and I want to live my life without being raped or sexually assaulted. And how I wanted to spend it with the two of them. Axton's face lit up again and I could tell that he wanted to leave too.

Axton and I went back to our rooms to gather a few necessities. We grabbed some money as well and left the house. Right before we left, we took a match and set fire to our house to cause a distraction. We took off running and ran right out of that horrific town. We did live close to a city, it was only a mile away from the town. We started walking towards the city without looking back once. I felt so happy. About thirty minutes later, we were walking into the city. We could smell the gas from cars driving in the street, and the aroma of hot dogs and popcorn. We could see crowds of people crossing the streets. We walked along the sidewalks, holding hands till we entered a hotel to stay for the night. I showed them my ID and gave them my credit card. We got a suite. We both tucked Caleb into his bed and he fell asleep right away. Axton made sure the front door was locked and we both headed into the bathroom. We took off our clothes and got into the shower together. We finally had a moment alone together. I wanted to be alone with Axton for a while. I took Axton's chin and moved his face closer to mine. I put my lips on his. We kissed just like the first night I ran into him. I ran my hands down his back and rested them on his dimples. I pulled his body closer to mine and moved my lips to his neck. I kissed, sucked, and bit his neck. He let out a little moan. We finished taking our shower.

I put some boxers on and brushed my teeth. Axton put on some boxers and sweatpants, then brushed his teeth. I left the bathroom first and crawled into our bed. Axton came out and crawled into the bed next to me and spooned me. I smiled and fell asleep. The next morning, I woke up to Caleb at the edge of the bed. "I'm hungry." I got up and walked over to the phone and ordered some room service. I ordered some biscuits and gravy, eggs, and some bacon. We waited for room service to get to our room. We played tic tac toe, while we waited. We jumped when we heard a knock at the door. I got up and walked to the door. I opened the door and there was a cart with covered platters on them. I tipped the waiter and said, "Thanks". I shut the door and pushed the cart into our room. I uncovered the platters and woke up Axton. We ate up all the food and relaxed in our beds watching TV for the morning. It was a good start to our new life. I got up and told them that we should go and explore the city. They were both very excited about that idea. So we got dressed and headed down to the lobby. We exited the hotel and walked down the streets.

There were smells that I haven't smelled in a while. I have missed that. The first thing we did was go to the mall and visited many stores. Caleb's favorite was Build-A-Bear. He made a dalmatian dog with a dress. It looked so pretty. Next, we went to Axrton's favorite, Mama's Homemade cookies. Axton got quite a few cookies that he couldn't wait to dig into. Lastly, we went to my favorite store, Lingerie-for-Everyone. Of course, Axton took Caleb to go play in one of those toy cars and stuff. When I went into the store, I got weird looks from a lot of people, but I didn't care, I just wanted some of these to surprise Axton. I grabbed a few and by a few I mean ten different items. I walked out of the store and met up with them. We exited the mall, but before we went back to the hotel, we stopped at a Mcdonalds' for lunch. I ordered a small cheeseburger with a coke. We got Caleb a Happy Meal. And Axton ordered fries, a big mac, and a sprite. We finished up our meal when a woman walked up to us and said, "Child, are you okay? Did these men take you away from your loving parents?" Axton and I looked at each other in disbelief. Caleb looked at the woman and said, "My original parents abused me and hurt me, these two are my new dads, who adopted me." Axton and I smiled. We got up, walked out, and walked to the hotel.

When we got to our suite, Caleb ran in and jumped on his bed. We immediately heard him put on SpongeBob and cuddled his new toy. Axton and I went to our room. Axton sat on the bed and ate some of his cookies. I went to the bathroom and tried on my black Camisole and g-string. As I walked out of the bedroom, I went to our bedroom door and locked it. I turned around to Axton and Axton's face was priceless. Axton walked up to me and pinned me to the wall. He whispered in my ear, "I wanna do bad things to you." I smiled and said, "Do all the bad things you want to do to me, daddy." Axton picked me up n carried me to the bed. He pinned me down and removed the g-string. He kissed his way down and started to suck my Cookie. I let out a tiny moan. As he sucked faster, I gripped the bed and moaned louder. About thirty minutes later, we were panting. I got up wrapped a blanket around me and went to check on Caleb. He was passed out on his bed. I kissed his head and covered him up. I walked back to our bedroom and lay down with Axton. We fell asleep with me spooning him.

Answer 2

damnn i love it ong, i absolutely luv how u dont explain certain things too much and so, so much happens in one parahgraph, i rlly like it, keep it up and continue making more great stories (finish this one tho (: its great!)

Answer 3

I love it. it really good. Its a type of story I love to read

Answer 4

it's really good kinda turned me on idk why

Answer 5

Also I wrote this with two real people, I'm one of them but if any of you know the other person, tell him to get his butt back online please <3

Answer 6

That's a good

Answer 7

The chapter you have written contains a lot of descriptive detail and focuses on the characters' actions and emotions. The use of present tense in the narrative gives the reader a sense of immediacy and helps to create a more immersive reading experience.

However, it's important to note that the content of the chapter may not be suitable for all readers. The chapter contains mature themes and explicit sexual content, so readers should use discretion when deciding whether to read it.

Overall, the chapter is well-written and effectively conveys the characters' emotions and experiences. The use of sensory details and dialogue helps to bring the story to life and create a sense of intimacy between the characters.

Answer 8

Good Job!