Question

I wrote a poem... Feedback and/or suggestions?

I'm wanna give up

They say all good things must end
memories washed away by the years
I grieve for each passing day
I am not

For I may never understand
what you wanted from me

It's over

Time is precious,
like a lost soul
why?
the hopelessness torments
I weep for each passing day
why?
I am not the one you wanted me to be

But I am still here
Although, death is coming quicker

They say all good things must end
why do all good things disappear?
Death is coming quicker
as I clasp my hands and weep
each passing day plagues the mind
as I clasp my hands and shed a tear

But I am still here
Death is coming quicker

Answer 1

yk this poem feels like this one song Do I Wanna Know?- by Arctic Monkeys
Is this a breakup poem?
It's so sad.
It's kinda making me cry.

Answer 2

It's like your waiting for death now since they're gone.

Answer 3

😕

Answer 4

Oliver?

Answer 5

This is a poem about how I'm never enough and how dying may just be better than living a false reality. Makes sense?

Answer 6

This poem, is absoluetly amazing. The part where it says, "They say all good things must end
why do all good things disappear?" It is very true. I understand everything in this. I love this. KEEP UP THE GREAT WORK

Answer 7

Great work here again, I would suggest adding a little more to this one if you can maybe like another four lines. other than that, its beautiful

Answer 8

I love It💕💔