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Can y'all tell me how this story is so far. It's in the comments

Answer 1

Your story is inaccessible.

Answer 2

Ok, type it into the comments youll have to go give me a little while cause it's nine pages long so far.

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I meant ill type the whole thing into here sorry im not good at spelling

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Okay.

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Hello! I'm Jenny, I have a boring life. I live with my little sister, her name is Lizzie. I call her Liz though. She can be very annoying sometimes. Our parents died when I was fifteen years old. I have always taken care of her on my own.

I have a job, I work at the candy factory. I bring candy home from work every day so Liz has some. The other day was my birthday. I turned 21. Liz made me lunch, and it wasn't that bad. Me and Liz go to the same school, but I always drive to school. Liz loves sitting in the back because she can sit with our dog carly. I make $20 everyday. I pay the rent every other month because the owner knows my parents are dead.

The owner knows my parents because they went to college together. I have so many friends at school. I am very protective over my little sister Liz. Carly is my service dog. Carly is a k-nine. She is always with me because I have a bad habit of letting my sugar level get too low to where I pass out. But because I have Carly she can run to get help as soon as my sugar starts to get low.

She also helps me get my bookbag and my shoes. Liz enjoys having me as her sister. I enjoy spending time with my little sister and my dog Carly. I feed Carly four times a day. She gets breakfast, lunch, dinner, and a dog bone for her snack. It's March 8, 2028 and I will go to college on April 6, 2028 because I want to make sure I don't forget everything I need to know for college so I can graduate.

Then when Liz graduates I can throw a party for her because I want her to have friends over for a party. I make sure I put Liz fist everyday. Everyday before I leave I make sure Liz has food to eat for dinner then I leave her chore list on the counter top. I always tell her what time I get home so she can have her chores done. Today I made a candy cane at work and it was very hard to make because I had to use red and white I had to twist them together then I gave it to Jax (someone I work and go to school with) to finish. Jax knows what time I have to leave to go take care of Liz. Jax always takes the candy out of my hand when it's time for me to go home and he hands me a bag of candy for Liz.

Jax is my best friend, sometimes when I'm at work Jax will feed Carly for me when I'm making candy. Carly is 3 in dog years but she is 45 in human years. I got Carly when she was 2 years old in dog years but she was 30 in human years. I spend ninety-nine percent of the time thinking of Liz, and I keep one percent of the time thinking of myself. Liz hates it when I check on her every two hours but I do it anyway because I love her.
Next month will be Liz's birthday, she was born on April 2, 2010. I always helped my sister get her stuff ready for school, until yesterday my sugar dropped when I went to run up stairs to get our bookbags. As soon as I made it up the stairs and got a little close to the hallway upstairs Carly heard me fall. Then next thing I know I'm at the hospital. Then after I woke up the doctor told me someone took my sister to school for me, and they were feeding Carly for me.

I told them thank you, then Carly came running into the room and she got on the end of the bed gently. After three hours, they called the school and asked for Jax. Then the school let Jax come get me. A few minutes later Jax was standing outside my hospital room waiting for me. After I got dressed Carly grabbed my bookbag that was on the ground.

So Jax drove me to school even though I told him I could drive on my own but he insisted on driving me to school. The next day Jax drove me and my Liz to an arts and crafts store and I bought yarn. It took me eight months to learn how to crochet, But I got the hang of it. Jax and I kinda fell in love with each other but Liz did not mind but she told Jax if he breaks my heart she will literally hurt him. Then one day a "nice" girl came to my school and we became friends, then I had Jax meet her.

The girl's name is Eleanor and she is very rich. She tried so hard to take Jax from me but it never worked. She even tried to bribe Jax but he said "No! I have a kind loving girlfriend! She did not bribe me to be her boyfriend! She shows me love! She does not show me money because I don't care about how much money she has!"
Then the girl came to me and said if you don't stay away from him I will hurt you! I said "girl you know I am training to be a cop soon right?" She ran scared it was a little funny. But because I was going to train to be a police officer, I had to go to South Africa for three months, and I had to take Carly with me of course. Jax took care of my sister for me. I came back and I went back to school but not as a student as a police officer Jax, Liz, and my old teachers were very proud of me.

We had a shooting after six weeks of me being a police officer. The person who shot up the school was Eleanor. She thought she could kill me but instead I shot her and of course everyone at the school did not care at all because no one liked her. Her family was okay with her being dead. I told them I'm sorry I shot her and they said "it's fine she always beat her five year old brother for no reason and used us as if we were money trees.”

So I asked them how long that has been happening and they said "since his fifth birthday." I did give the girl a nice funeral even though she tried so hard to take Jax away from me. I felt so bad I killed the girl though… I mean she seemed so kind at first then I realized she was just using me to get closer to Jax. I will never let anyone take Jax away from me.

I was not one of the famous kids in my school, until I became a policeman. Everyone looks up to me so much. The new students who come into "my" school feel safe when I am there at "my" school, and when a different police officer is at "my" school the people start to ask if I'm okay. I mean I'm glad they are worried about me, but they need to worry about their class work and the teachers need to continue teaching like it's a normal day as if I were there. I am glad they worry about the safety of my health but I know they have more important things to worry about.

The day I come back everyone says "I'm glad you're okay we were so worried about you Miss Jenny." Then teachers are always taking me to get coffee and doughnuts every morning. They take turns and when I get food from McDonalds the teachers are always saying "we bought you some coffee and doughnuts." Then they see that I went to McDonalds and they're like "Oh sorry I didn't know you went to McDonalds sorry Officer Jenny." I tell them it's okay, cause it's not their fault they didn't know I got mcdonalds.

So I gave them a calendar that says what days I will be going to mcdonalds and what days I will not be going to mcdonalds. After everyone goes home I find out that two of the students were still there after I had closed the school. They were both girls, one had black hair and the other had white hair. I knew who they were because they always give me pictures everyday. I know who their parents are, I know how old they are because they told me all about themselves.

One of the girls came to me with bruises all over her body but she told me not to worry about it because her mom will beat her even more then in the morning, I swung by the girls house and asked where her daughter was. The mother said upstairs first door to the left. I knocked on the door. The girl opened the door and she was wearing all white the shirt was long sleeved and she had white jeans on. I had rolled the sleeves on the shirt up then I saw cuts and bruises all over her arms. I ran downstairs and asked the mom why her daughter had cuts and bruises all over her arms. The mom never told me why.

Later that night I snuck into the girl's window and sat inside her closet so I could see everything that happened. Then the girl got up and handed me a camera so I could take videos of what was happening to her. After her mom left the room the girl fell to the ground. I ran out of the closet and grabbed the girl before she hit the ground. Then I ran down the stairs and arrested the mother for child abuse.


The mother asked where I came from. I never told the mother where I had come from. She just had to know she was going to jail for one to five years in jail for child abuse. I put the mother in handcuffs and took her to my car, then I drove her to prison and told my boss she abused a child so she was put into jail until she was able to have her trial. During the trial the woman hit the little girl. The woman was guilty of course the judge knew she was guilty way before the mother hit her child. The judge had her put in prison until she was to die. But the child chose me to take care of her and I didn’t understand why, but when she was able to be adopted she didn't want to leave me . The first time the girl was going to be adopted she made trouble because she didn't want them to adopt her.

The girl never told me until the spring. She ran through the school halls screaming my name as she was also being chased through the halls by two other children but they were carrying a belt. Then I heard the girl screaming my name so I ran until I ran right into her. Then she jumped up really fast and hid behind me. I asked her what's wrong and she said two girls were after her, one had a belt and the other girl had a baseball bat. Then the girls saw me and they dropped the weapons and said "oh look the little baby went crying to her mommy, the girl is scared of us." Then the girl said "I'm not scared of either of you girls." then they said "prove it!" The girl said "ok I will prove it!"

Then I made the rules 1. No weapons 2. one on one 3. no telling each other what to do to the girl. Then the girls got scared. They did fight but then the two girls gave up and ran after the girl had beat the first girl up. The two girls had run off to the principal's office. The principal soon came out to take the girl to the office. The other two girls got suspended for 10 days and the girl got suspended for only 2 days. I sighed, "let's go home." The girl nodded, "I'm sorry I just wanted to prove to them I wasn't scared of them." I smiled slightly "it's alright you just wanted to prove yourself to them, just don't do it again" The girl smiles "so i'm not in trouble?” I said, "no of course not, but you're not allowed to leave the house unless it's with me for the two days you're suspended." The girl nodded again and said "that’s fair enough" We both walked to the car. I buckled in the girl. "So what do you want for lunch when we get back to the house?" Carly jumped into the car. The girl said, "sandwiches and chips!" I smile "alright we can do that for lunch then '' After we got home I made lunch, I did feed Carly after I had made lunch for me and the girl. After my sister Liz got off the bus and came inside to get her after school snack the girl blurted "Officer Jessie will you adopt me?!?!?!?" Me and Liz stood in silence.
Then the girl said "hello?" Me and Liz blinked and said "sorry I was just thinking" I said "would you really like me to adopt you?" the girl said yes I would like you to adopt me. I made trouble with the people who were going to adopt me, because I wanted you to adopt me, not them." I told the girl to "let me think about it and I'll get back to you about adopting you." After two days I picked Liz and the girl up early and went to court so I could adopt the girl. The girl's mother had to sign the adoption papers but she kept saying "no this is my child get your own little child officer!!" The girl said "I was not your child I was your beating bag you crazy lady!!" The mother had to be forced by her parole officer to sign the papers.

Her parole officer said "sign the papers or I'll tase you lady!" The judge was banging her gavel and said "this is my court room and I didn't not ask you to talk Ms. Miller, so please sit back down, shut up, and sign those adoption papers!!!!" After I adopted the child and we got back to my house, she told me her name was 2075. I asked her if she was joking and she ran to her moms house and grabbed her birth certificate, then ran back to my house and handed me her birth certificate. I took the child to get her name changed.

I asked the girl what she wants her name to be and she said "I want you to choose my name." I gave her ten names. They were "Avery, Kelly, Daisy, Molly, Cali, Hayley, Bailey, Gracie, Saddie, and Katelyn. She chose the name Katelyn. I said okay and asked "what do you want your middle name to be?"
She told me "you pick my middle name." I gave her ten middle names. They are "Jade, Rose, Mae, Margaret, Ann-marrie, Frances, Pearl, Blair, Mary, Louise." She chose the name Louise. Then she chose my last name which is Harper.

Two years later me and Jax got married. I ended up getting pregnant with Jax’s baby. On the day I found out I was pregnant I called Jax while he was getting dinner and I told him “Come home now it’s important!” He heard me crying over the phone he asked me if I was alright and if Liz, and Katelyn were okay, I said “Were all okay baby, just stay safe on your way home I love you bye babe” When he got home he set the food down and ran around the house calling for me and I screamed “I’m upstairs come here!” he ran up the stairs and said “what’s wrong tell what’s going on please”.

I showed him the pregnancy test and he started crying happy tears and he held me in his arms. Then Liz and Katelyn came running to the bathroom asking why we were crying. I told them “I'm pregnant!” They both had the biggest smile on their faces, and Liz screamed “I’m going to be an aunt!” Katelyn screamed “I'm finally going to be an older sister, I’ve always wanted to be an older sister!” The next day I went to the hospital to get an ultrasound and the doctor told me I was 2 weeks pregnant. I asked the doctor “how am I 2 weeks pregnant because 2 weeks ago I got sick non-stop every time I ate something?” Then the doctor explained how my morning sickness made me sick every time I ate something.

Then I went home and as soon as I walked in the door I changed into my workout outfit and took Carly on a walk, I walked down a street that i’ve never walked down before and somebody followed me then I grabbed my phone and called Jax and told him to come get because someone was following me and it was creeping me out, I told him to hurry. I sent him my location and he said “i'll be there soon, just keep jogging and i’ll be there soon to pick you up i'm in the car now stay on the phone with me until I get there” as soon as he picked me up the person started chasing the car. So I called a friend that I worked with and she arrested the person and asked them why they were chasing me.

The person said, "That's for me to know and for you to find out, now I'm leaving because I need to go find her.” My friend made him sit back down, and he didn’t so she said “Sir if you don’t sit back down I'm going to have to handcuff you again. I don’t think that's what you want now is it?” The guy replied with “no that’s not what I want at all now please let me go.” She said “I’m going to ask you again, why were you following her? Until you answer me, you're staying here.” He finally said “I was trying to find out where she lived because she is my long lost twin sister we were split up at birth. I need to talk to her.” My friend said “Do you have proof that you're her brother? If so, I need to see it.” He said "take me to my house and I’ll grab our birth certificates.”

So she drove him to his house and he grabbed them both and she made sure they were real and they were real alright. She called me and I didn’t answer the first time so she called me again and I answered the phone and she said “Hey, I need to talk to you, so meet me at the park downtown.” so I told her “ok I'll be there in 20 minutes.” When I got there I walked over to her and asked her who the man was. She said “He’s your twin brother”
(To be continued)

Answer 7

Its pretty good so far, don't give upp

Answer 8

Can someone help me figure out a name for my story??

Answer 9

Wow that's pretty good so far. While I currently have no title suggestions I will continue to think and let you know if I come up with any.

Answer 10

This is pretty impressive. Everything is good except for one thing in my opinion. I feel like you are rushing from subject to subject right away, like maybe spread words out or stay more on one subject like talk ab it

Answer 11

So far so gud!

Answer 12

Woah it looks amazing

Answer 13

It looks great.

Answer 14

Cool!!