I wrote a song about my life. I need yall to critique it so I can fix the parts that suck.

I'm feeling lost and alone, even when I'm surrounded
By people I know, but I feel like I'm grounded
I hate the way I've acted, the things I've done
I wish I could rewind time and undo what I've begun

I wanna start over, make things right
I wanna be someone that's worth the fight
I hate the way I've been, I hate the way I've lived
I wanna start over, my past I wanna rid

I've been selfish and cruel, to myself and to others
I've been blinded by anger, by fear, by lovers
I've hurt those I love, I've hurt myself too
I wish I could rewind time, start anew

I wanna start over, make things right
I wanna be someone that's worth the fight
I hate the way I've been, I hate the way I've lived
I wanna start over, my past I wanna rid

I know I can't change the past, but I can learn from it
I can grow and be better, I can make a difference
I'll take it one step at a time, one day at a time
I'll make my future bright, I'll make it mine

I wanna start over, make things right
I wanna be someone that's worth the fight
I hate the way I've been, I hate the way I've lived
I wanna start over, my past I wanna rid

I'll take responsibility, for my actions and my words
I'll make amends, for the pain that I've caused
I'll be the change I wanna see, I'll be the light
I wanna start over, and make things right.

Question

I wrote a song about my life. I need yall to critique it so I can fix the parts that suck.

I'm feeling lost and alone, even when I'm surrounded
By people I know, but I feel like I'm grounded
I hate the way I've acted, the things I've done
I wish I could rewind time and undo what I've begun

I wanna start over, make things right
I wanna be someone that's worth the fight
I hate the way I've been, I hate the way I've lived
I wanna start over, my past I wanna rid

I've been selfish and cruel, to myself and to others
I've been blinded by anger, by fear, by lovers
I've hurt those I love, I've hurt myself too
I wish I could rewind time, start anew

I wanna start over, make things right
I wanna be someone that's worth the fight
I hate the way I've been, I hate the way I've lived
I wanna start over, my past I wanna rid

I know I can't change the past, but I can learn from it
I can grow and be better, I can make a difference
I'll take it one step at a time, one day at a time
I'll make my future bright, I'll make it mine

I wanna start over, make things right
I wanna be someone that's worth the fight
I hate the way I've been, I hate the way I've lived
I wanna start over, my past I wanna rid

I'll take responsibility, for my actions and my words
I'll make amends, for the pain that I've caused
I'll be the change I wanna see, I'll be the light
I wanna start over, and make things right.

laylapoisonous · Answer

I Honestly Love I don't feel like you should change anything It speaks Emotion And I relate to it all Great Job Like truly Can't wait to see more from you!!

pennalopee · Answer

This was really good and I feel you on this a lot you did great keep it up if you have more work please tag me in it I would love to see it

badboy1557 · Answer

Love you blake 🙌🏼 and also I find the song pretty good I mean I can relate to it a lot, in my own opinion there's no need for Changes in it

baconway · Answer

Thank you guys! It means a lot, i completed this one a few days ago. I'm working on another one right now that's almost done

badboy1557 · Answer

If you could tag me on the next one it would be appreciated

baconway · Answer

@badboy1557 wrote:

If you could tag me on the next one it would be appreciated

Will do. Though the one I'm working on now is a little personal so I don't know if I should post it or not.

badboy1557 · Answer

@baconway wrote:

@badboy1557 wrote:

If you could tag me on the next one it would be appreciated

Will do. Though the one I'm working on now is a little personal so I don't know if I should post it or not.

Ah that's alright bro, don't worry