This is a song a made a week ago.. hope you all like it... it's called world gone mad

Cold and dark, broken and gone,I can't take it anymore, life is hard but it could be ruffer, nothing to say nothing to do, No one is there and it's hunting you, down in the sea where the angels go, in the night where the souls gose and where the fire burns. Cold and dark, broken and gone, there is no more happiness anymore. Love is gone...

Love is gone!! As the families breaking down, hearts are breaking, the world has fallen apart, everyone is crying, everything is breaking apart,now. The world is at war.. blood all over, people dying around the world,now it's time to start again, now it's time to fight ( the world is ending. The world is ENDING!) It's now time to show this WORLD who is the real ENEMY!!

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This is a song a made a week ago.. hope you all like it... it's called world gone mad

Cold and dark, broken and gone,I can't take it anymore, life is hard but it could be ruffer, nothing to say nothing to do, No one is there and it's hunting you, down in the sea where the angels go, in the night where the souls gose and where the fire burns. Cold and dark, broken and gone, there is no more happiness anymore. Love is gone...

Love is gone!! As the families breaking down, hearts are breaking, the world has fallen apart, everyone is crying, everything is breaking apart,now. The world is at war.. blood all over, people dying around the world,now it's time to start again, now it's time to fight ( the world is ending. The world is ENDING!) It's now time to show this WORLD who is the real ENEMY!!

velmalovesshaggy145 · Answer

@Midnight97 It's very good. I like the lyrics, they invoke a lot of emotion and convey a detailed story. The lyrics also make good on the song title. I think you should use a 1 5 6 4 progression in the key of a minor or d minor. Preferably Am C F G or Dm F C G. I would maybe add a pre-chorus or an extra verse. Also, try out rephrasing the song but in a major(happier) sense.But overall a very song, and I hope to hear more!

Midnight97 · Answer

@velmalovesshaggy145 wrote:

@Midnight97 It's very good. I like the lyrics, they invoke a lot of emotion and convey a detailed story. The lyrics also make good on the song title. I think you should use a 1 5 6 4 progression in the key of a minor or d minor. Preferably Am C F G or Dm F C G. I would maybe add a pre-chorus or an extra verse. Also, try out rephrasing the song but in a major(happier) sense.But overall a very song, and I hope to hear more!

Thank I'll work on making them better

velmalovesshaggy145 · Answer

But if you rephrase it do the 1564 chord progression in  key of c or g

Midnight97 · Answer

Will do

gcc8617 · Answer

Hmm, Good job. This is something we go through in real life families are indeed breaking down and crumbling this can be reversed only if we fix it. We continue to let life go on this way. How can we fix this? How can we stop the killing and the murders? From killing our own blood and our own kind? But good job hun I'm proud of how far you have come.

Midnight97 · Answer

@gcc8617 wrote:

Hmm, Good job. This is something we go through in real life families are indeed breaking down and crumbling this can be reversed only if we fix it. We continue to let life go on this way. How can we fix this? How can we stop the killing and the murders? From killing our own blood and our own kind? But good job hun I'm proud of how far you have come.

Thanks auntie

gcc8617 · Answer

@midnight97 wrote:

@gcc8617 wrote:

Hmm, Good job. This is something we go through in real life families are indeed breaking down and crumbling this can be reversed only if we fix it. We continue to let life go on this way. How can we fix this? How can we stop the killing and the murders? From killing our own blood and our own kind? But good job hun I'm proud of how far you have come.

Thanks auntie

Ofc hun. But I meant what I said.

Midnight97 · Answer

@gcc8617 wrote:

@midnight97 wrote:

@gcc8617 wrote:

Hmm, Good job. This is something we go through in real life families are indeed breaking down and crumbling this can be reversed only if we fix it. We continue to let life go on this way. How can we fix this? How can we stop the killing and the murders? From killing our own blood and our own kind? But good job hun I'm proud of how far you have come.

Thanks auntie

Ofc hun. But I meant what I said.

I know, and like I said I'll try to make them better in the future

gcc8617 · Answer

@midnight97 wrote:

@gcc8617 wrote:

@midnight97 wrote:

@gcc8617 wrote:

Hmm, Good job. This is something we go through in real life families are indeed breaking down and crumbling this can be reversed only if we fix it. We continue to let life go on this way. How can we fix this? How can we stop the killing and the murders? From killing our own blood and our own kind? But good job hun I'm proud of how far you have come.

Thanks auntie

Ofc hun. But I meant what I said.

I know, and like I said I'll try to make them better in the future

No I'm not saying anything is wrong with it. I was simply asking relative questions that went with your words.

Wankle1222 · Answer

yes

Fortish · Answer

I love it, keep it up midnight!

Midnight97 · Answer

@fortish wrote:

I love it, keep it up midnight!

Thanks...

CrumbCrumbington · Answer

*rougher

Midnight97 · Answer

@crumbcrumbington wrote:

*rougher

Thanks for that lol

doggofroyo · Answer

Yes. 
I like it

Midnight97 · Answer

@doggofroyo wrote:

Yes. I like it

Glad you do

La1la · Answer

I love it

luhivqqcherry · Answer

yesss super good

Midnight97 · Answer

@la1la wrote:

I love it

Glad you do

Midnight97 · Answer

@luhivqqcherry wrote:

yesss super good

Thanks

mikewwe13 · Answer

Wow dude that song is intense! The lyrics really paint a dark picture of what the world could become. You put a lot of emotion into writing it. Some of those lines like "love is gone" and "the families breaking down" are really heavy. I can totally imagine it with a heavy guitar rock sound. Nice job capturing the vibe of the world gone mad in the song. It's not usually the kind of music I'm into but I can appreciate you putting your feelings into writing. Music is a great way to express what's going on inside. Keep at it man!

Midnight97 · Answer

@mikewwe13 wrote:

Wow dude that song is intense! The lyrics really paint a dark picture of what the world could become. You put a lot of emotion into writing it. Some of those lines like "love is gone" and "the families breaking down" are really heavy. I can totally imagine it with a heavy guitar rock sound. Nice job capturing the vibe of the world gone mad in the song. It's not usually the kind of music I'm into but I can appreciate you putting your feelings into writing. Music is a great way to express what's going on inside. Keep at it man!

Hah thanks and I will