Question

Hey guys! I have another poem! Hope you like it!
Title: Shallow
If this is the end
Let go silently
Because I don't know if I can handle
The pain of losing you
If this is you saying goodbye
Don't tell me
Just hold me close
Tell me you love me over and over.
Cuz I'm running out of air, I'm on my knees
Don't know if you are listening
I'm begging you not to leave
Because losing you would mean losing me
After everything, why won't you stop and think
What that would do to me?
I've almost lost you once
But twice,
Would literally kill me
You don't understand
How much I need you to stay
But I know you're gonna do it anyway
You're right, there's nothing I can do
I'm so close to losing my mind
Knife to the heart I feel like I'm dying
Might as well go with you
Cause I can't do this
Can't be here and watch you bleed
Never felt so useless cuz I can't do anything
I wish I could make you see
Losing you would make me feel so empty
What happened to the future?
It used to be so crystal clear
Now I don't know what it'll become
If you're no longer here
I'd go back to being shallow
Half of who I am
Unable to think unable to feel.
Unable to know if any of this was even real....
Shallow

Answer 1

nice

Answer 2

I think this is a great poem, you did a really nice job here. There was a good structure, and I like the expression and imagery, and it even seemed like a song. I would suggest continuing to use these types of poetic elements, in addition to the figurative language, as those really shape up a poem. Overall, I would definitely give this poem an A+

Answer 3

look great

Answer 4

amazing poemm I can tell you put ur heart into it !!! .

Answer 5

This doesn't sounds like poetry AT ALL.

Answer 6

It's awesome.. keeps it up!!!

Answer 7

it looks good nice poem

Answer 8

nice poem

Answer 9

ok

Answer 10

Nice

Answer 11

i like it