Question

Hey guys, i have some song drafts from a long time ago and I was wondering if y'all could help finish writing it or give me ideas on how to finish it its weird ik but here it is: you took her to our hotel there's blood in the waters everybody can tell your bout to hold her I wanna tell her about you cold shoulder because I still remember when you said you loved me (don't come and look at this just to hate on me)

Answer 1

Well make sure there is punctuation, you don't want it to be a run on sentence.

Answer 2

Maybe you should add somethings that make it more Mysterious?

Answer 3

I don't think you should say "bout" you should say about.

Answer 4

When you're writing things you want it to look kind of professional, but make sure you keep the reader engaged and don't make it boring.

Answer 5

Remember each and every detail matters and will make the story even more fun to read.

Answer 6

After hotel you maybe could put room.

Answer 7

I'm willing to read the finished product once its done luvv, and if you have any questions on how to write, or to proof read it, hit me up.

Answer 8

You have a wonder song going on and i think you will become an amazing singer one day. Just keep up the good work and you will be there in no time! you got this!

Answer 9

thank you for y'alls suggestions <3

Answer 10

your welcome <3

Answer 11

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