Question

maybe need help

Answer 1

I'm just posting some of my old old story's and I need feedback

Answer 2

1. So I think what will happen next is that they will help the president at the time but will stop near the end because their parents will stop then. I think that because it would be just boring if nothing happened, which is surprising. Like those noodles and the other guy (I forgot his name). And the president will turn out fake. I don't know what I'm writing. But maybe if the siencist will come to Noodles and the guy and do something with them? I don't know what I'm writing so maybe the Noodles turn out to be a Roboter from a bad scientist or the president is bad and will actually destroy the world and the siencist are just fake. Or maybe noodles is an undercover scientist or the boss of the scientist or Noodles is actually the President. I don't think anything I write will happen next so yeah i just dont know im still writing. What I think will happen next is that the president is the president, that noodles are noodles, that the guy is the guy. But I hope that the first part will happen. Or maybe the story will end after chapter 4 but that is noonsens.

Answer 3

2. I have a cat but it annoys me when I want to do my homework so I want to build an invention that will entertain it for a longer time.I would build an invention for my cat. She would bring a lot of things to my cat. She was a cat food dispenser, a scratching post and a washing machine for the cat. It did a lot of work and my cat definitely enjoyed it. My invention for the cat was called The cat entertainment.The invention for my cat kept her entertained for hours. My invention would also have a bed for the cat. I might even be able to sell the invention. My cat is very active, she is a little bit scratchy but only when you bathe her that's why I want to build the invention. My invention is black with white branches where you can sit or lie down, the invention was in the shape of a tree and in the crown of the tree was the bed The tree would also be so that you can go inside, it would be 1 meter tall

Answer 4

3. HOW BOB AND JOE SWITZER
CHANGED THE WORLD

Joe and Bob Switzer changed the world in a lot of ways. I only want to focus on the main thing they changed with their day glow color.


Before I start, I want to give you some information about them. They were born in Fromberg, Montana. They moved to Cleveland, Ohio. The dayglow was invented in 1916. Bob switzer died at the age of 83 on the 20 august 1997. Joe died in 1973. Lets just begin


Joe and Bob switzer changed a lot in the world. They made many things safer like buildings with exit signs or police vests. But the dayglo color isn’t just saving lives it’s also very good for firms who sell kitchen products. It is really important learning where the cool glowing bags for sweets come from! To Be honest it’s not that important but I need to write something. So another thing that is important to learn is that they have made life easier. I think that we all use a lot of the products.


Now I'm gonna write 3 reasons why they changed the world. The first reason is that they made, as I already said, people's lives easier. The second reason is that they made buildings safer. They saved a lot of lives and they also helped in world war 2 i think. The last reason is that they are kinda idols to some people/ With that I mean that they struggled a lot but didn’t give up which I personally think is cool.

Well that's all it’s not very good but bye i guess. I'm sorry I couldn't finish it and it's not good but I hope I will get an 80..

Answer 5

4. DIE GESCHICHTE OHNE NAME


Unsere geschichte beginnt im jahre 2250 in der welt hat sich vieles verändert die welt wurde in zwei hälften gespalten entweder wirst du in bereich 1 geboren oder in bereich 2 bereich 1 ist erfolgreich es gibt alles da gebäude sind aus gold großstädte wolkenkratzer und noch viel mehr jedoch in bereich 2 da wurde man nicht gerne wohnen manche leute sagen das in bereich 2 gauner und banditen leben naja eigentlich weis das niemand da essbereich 1 verboten ist zu bereich 2 zugehen dasselbe gilt auch für bereich 2. Die einzigen die nach bereich 2 dürfen sind die hoch wichtigen leute wie die regierung von bereich 1 in bereich 2 gibt es keine regierung. Der grund warum die erde in zwei seiten geteilt wurde fragst du dich? Naja ich habe ein paar bücher über die geschichte gelesen jedoch ich bin mir sicher dass das alles nur lügen sind. Warum? Naja ein buch sagt zum beispiel das der grund ist das aliens zur erde gekommen sind und die erde gespalten hat totaler unsinn wenn du mich fragst. Eine andere sache ist dass gott die leute die gut sind in bereich 1 lassen und die schlechten nach bereich 2 und das glauben alle sogar meine eltern könnt ihr das glauben? Naja der boss von bereich 1 ist naja mein opa. In bereich 1 müssen die leute direkt an ihrem 18 geburtstag heiraten und frauen dürfen nur bis 20 schwanger werden sonst werden die kinder zu bereich 2 gesendet ohne die eltern. Und wenn du jedoch unter 18 schwanger wirst wirst du getötet. Eine andere sache ist das du sobald du 12 bist kennst du dein neuen mann manchmal ist der mann in deinem alter jedoch kann es auch passieren das du mit einem 60 jährigen mann verheiratet wirst.

Answer 6

5. So the monster had dark fur, it looked so scary. His eyes were true dark red and true as the eyes of a human. He looked very angry and around his dark fur was a red dot. He looked so creepy and evil I was so scared he looked like the devil. He wore human clothes, blood red trousers that had a few holes and a hat lso a cap he had black shoes on. he can also transform himself into a person if he is a person he wears blue trousers a light pink t-shirt on the t-shirt it said ¨STEUERN SIND RAUB¨ he looked relatively friendly and he had brown hair.

Answer 7

6. What i think about it.

My thoughts about valentines are different. I don't really like it but it has some good things. I will write one paragraph about what I like and one about what I do not like.

So i will start with what I like about the day. The first thing is that everything in storses are not that expensive as they usually are. I know that is not a real reason but I just always buy some things that my parents won't allow me to buy because they are too expensive. The second reason is that the talks I hear I mean when you walk in the hallway you can hear some things you can't hear on normal days. Another thing I like is that everyone is pretty quiet and aren't yelling at each other. By that I mean the school or other places with a lot of people. I think those are the only things I like about Valentine's day. I will just go to the bad things.

So here is the probably biggest reason why I hate valentines day. So the reason is that everyone I know is talking about valentines day. I mean so many people why can't they just talk on the phone or in a private room. But whatever, I think that it may be annoying but it is understandable. The second thing that I hate about it is that there are so many people on tik tok or online games. I am personally very often on tik tok and usually my fy is full of roblox minecraft or story videos but now my entire fy is full of valentines day videos. But let's just come to my last reason why I don't like it. This reason may sound stupid but it is just for me very weird. I just always think of couples when I hear about valentines day and i don't hate couples but they are sometimes annoying.

Well that's it i don't really hate the day but it is not my favorite day of the year so i guess it ok..

Answer 8

7. CHOCOLATE CHIP COOKIES



How 1930 by mistake our still loved chocolate chip cookies were invented! The invention of the chocolate chip cookies is based on a coincidence.

Let's start at the beginning before the chocolate chip cookies were invented! The person who invented the chocolate chip cookies was Ruth Wakefield. Ruth and her husband bought an old horse restaurant. They had a dining restaurant. The dining was not big, it was kinda small. The name of the restaurant was Toll House Inn. At this time they sold chocolate butter drop cookies.

As co-owner, manager, hostess, and cook Ruth was very busy. Once a day she was so busy that she took instead of malted chocolate chunks. So the chocolate chip cookies were invented.
All the guests thought they were so delicious.

After the cookies became famous the company Nestle wanted to make a deal with Ruth.
The Nestle company sold chocolate bars with cut lines. And they printed Ruth's receipt on the
back side of the bars.

It was a good coincidence that Ruth invented the chocolate chip cookies.
Today, her invention is still wildly popular and new creations are still popping up everywhere.

Answer 9

1. This story seems to lack focus and direction. The writer appears to be rambling and unsure of where they want the story to go. It may benefit from some editing and refining to make it more cohesive and engaging.

2. This story about inventing an entertainment invention for a cat is quite creative and fun. The writer has a clear vision for the invention and includes details about its features and benefits. It's a light-hearted and enjoyable read.

3. This story about Joe and Bob Switzer is informative and well-organized. The writer gives background information about the inventors and their impact on the world. The three reasons provided for how they changed the world are clear and supported by examples. Overall, it's a well-written piece.

4. This story is in a different language and as a result, it's difficult to provide feedback on the content. It may be helpful to translate the story into English for a more accurate assessment.

5. The description of the monster in this story is vivid and evocative. The writer effectively conveys the fear and creepiness of the monster through detailed descriptions of its appearance. It's engaging and impactful.

6. The writer has a clear opinion about Valentine's Day and effectively conveys both the things they like and dislike about the holiday. The reasons provided are personal and relatable, making the story engaging and genuine.

7. This story about the invention of chocolate chip cookies is interesting and informative. The writer provides a detailed account of how the cookies were invented by Ruth Wakefield and includes interesting details about the history of the invention. It's a well-structured and engaging piece.

Answer 10

lmao

Answer 11

For the first story, it seems like you have a lot of different ideas and possibilities for what could happen next. It might be helpful to narrow down your options and focus on one particular direction for the plot. This can make the story more cohesive and easier for the reader to follow.

Regarding the second story, it's great that you're thinking of ways to keep your cat entertained. However, it might be helpful to do some research and see if there are any existing products on the market that could serve this purpose. That way, you can get some inspiration and maybe even improve upon existing ideas.

Finally, for the third story, it sounds like you have a very vivid and descriptive image of the monster in your head. It might be helpful to include more details about the setting or the character's actions to help build tension and suspense. This can make the story more engaging and exciting for the reader.