Thoughts?

The white lights shimmer on the moon lit beach where my wedding took place. My honey blond hair flows down the sides of my shoulders, and my puffy white wedding dress lays draped over the golden brown Sand. James gazes lovingly in my eyes as we stand there hand in hand, the preacher clears his throat.

“We gather here today to witness and celebrate an act of deep love with Amélie Beauchene and James douglas in their devotion, respect, and love for each other wish to unite in the holy bond of marriage” He said in a loud booming voice James smiles rubbing my hand with this thumb softly The preacher looks around the room “and to dedicate themselves to each other's happiness and well‑being as life mates and partners. On behalf of them, I welcome you all” He says smiling The pracher turns to james

“Do you James douglas take Amélie Beauchene to be you lawfully wedded wife to have and to hold from this day forward, for better, for worse, for richer, for poorer, in sickness and in health, to love and to cherish, till death you do part” He says smiling at James james turns and look at me giving my hands a gentle squeeze

“I do” he says softly looking in my eyes the preacher turns to me and gives me a warm smile “And do you Amélie Beauchene take James douglas to be you lawfully wedded husband to have and to hold from this day forward, for better, for worse, for richer, for poorer, in sickness and in health, to love and to cherish, till death you do part” I smile a tear sliding down my cheek

“I do” I say softly Smiling at James The preacher turns to look at us both “ Amélie Beauchene and James douglas, you have expressed your love to one another through the commitment and promises you have just made. It is with these in mind that I pronounce you husband and wife” he pauses taking a breath
“you may now kiss the bride” James swiftly swings me to the side pressing his lips to mine everyone stands up clapping as we pull aprt from the kiss The guest begin to fade in the background as i turn Glancing from side to side “James” i say Squeezing his hand he smiles gazing into my eyes
“i’m sorry” He says as he begins to fade “No james stop…please…. Please Don’t leave me again” i say with a chocked sob tears pouring down my cheeks He gently cresses my cheek “its ok” he says softly his voice growing faint
“James!” i Scream trying to grab his fading body “James!” I sob as he fully disappearss my head shoots up from my pillow “James!” i scream in the empty room

Question

Thoughts?

The white lights shimmer on the moon lit beach where my wedding took place. My honey blond hair flows down the sides of my shoulders, and my puffy white wedding dress lays draped over the golden brown Sand. James gazes lovingly in my eyes as we stand there hand in hand, the preacher clears his throat.

“We gather here today to witness and celebrate an act of deep love with Amélie Beauchene and James douglas in their devotion, respect, and love for each other wish to unite in the holy bond of marriage” He said in a loud booming voice James smiles rubbing my hand with this thumb softly The preacher looks around the room “and to dedicate themselves to each other's happiness and well‑being as life mates and partners. On behalf of them, I welcome you all” He says smiling The pracher turns to james

“Do you James douglas take Amélie Beauchene to be you lawfully wedded wife to have and to hold from this day forward, for better, for worse, for richer, for poorer, in sickness and in health, to love and to cherish, till death you do part” He says smiling at James james turns and look at me giving my hands a gentle squeeze

“I do” he says softly looking in my eyes the preacher turns to me and gives me a warm smile “And do you Amélie Beauchene take James douglas to be you lawfully wedded husband to have and to hold from this day forward, for better, for worse, for richer, for poorer, in sickness and in health, to love and to cherish, till death you do part” I smile a tear sliding down my cheek

“I do” I say softly Smiling at James The preacher turns to look at us both “  Amélie Beauchene and James douglas, you have expressed your love to one another through the commitment and promises you have just made. It is with these in mind that I pronounce you husband and wife” he pauses taking a breath
 “you may now kiss the bride” James swiftly swings me to the side pressing his lips to mine everyone stands up clapping as we pull aprt from the kiss The guest begin to fade in the background as i turn Glancing from side to side “James” i say Squeezing his hand he smiles gazing into my eyes
“i’m sorry” He says as he begins to fade “No james stop…please…. Please Don’t leave me again” i say with a chocked sob tears pouring down my cheeks He gently cresses my cheek “its ok” he says softly his voice growing faint 
“James!” i Scream trying to grab his fading body “James!” I sob as he fully disappearss my head shoots up from my pillow “James!” i scream in the empty room

Nightmoon · Answer

Its amazing keep up! (:

suger · Answer

@nightmoon wrote:

Its amazing keep up! (:

thank yew and i will ^^

Nightmoon · Answer

@suger wrote:

@nightmoon wrote:

Its amazing keep up! (:

thank yew and i will ^^

ofc!! :D

Lustforlana · Answer

i　NEED that whole story

suger · Answer

@lustforlana wrote:

i　NEED that whole story

lol I'm still working on it but i would be happy to share the first chapter that i have started

Lustforlana · Answer

@suger wrote:

@lustforlana wrote:

i　NEED that whole story

lol I'm still working on it but i would be happy to share the first chapter that i have started

Yes! This was absolutely amazing!

Manny300303199 · Answer

i like it

toga · Answer

@suger wrote:

@lustforlana wrote:

i　NEED that whole story

lol I'm still working on it but i would be happy to share the first chapter that i have started

well when you finish let us see it

Extrinix · Answer

Wedding story?

XxDevilxX · Answer

It very good and interesting! Great job!

However I did see a couple typos: so where it says "you lawfully wedded husband" and "you lawfully wedded wife" the "you" should be a "your"

Also secondly where it says "till death you do part" it should say "till death do you part" unless you intentionally have it "you do part" intentionally.

Just was some things I saw that I thought were little minor mistakes.

Otherwise amazing job!!

gingy57016 · Answer

good job you did amazing

Juss1Jordan · Answer

It's amazing !!

jayfafr · Answer

ts fire twin

suger · Answer

@jayfafr wrote:

ts fire twin

Thank yew thank yew ^^

suger · Answer

@juss1jordan wrote:

It's amazing !!

Thank yew much ^^

suger · Answer

@gingy57016 wrote:

good job you did amazing

Thank yew kindly ^^

suger · Answer

@extrinix wrote:

Wedding story?

Eh not really its kinda a ghost story is called phantom kisses

suger · Answer

@xxdevilxx wrote:

It very good and interesting! Great job! However I did see a couple typos: so where it says "you lawfully wedded husband" and "you lawfully wedded wife" the "you" should be a "your" Also secondly where it says "till death you do part" it should say "till death do you part" unless you intentionally have it "you do part" intentionally. Just was some things I saw that I thought were little minor mistakes. Otherwise amazing job!!

Thanks for letting me know i appreciate it

suger · Answer

@toga wrote:

@suger wrote:

@lustforlana wrote:

i　NEED that whole story

lol I'm still working on it but i would be happy to share the first chapter that i have started

well when you finish let us see it

I should be posting it today ^^