Question

so i started writing a story and i want yall opinion on it so far 😭

Righteous heir

Alexander Watson was an orphan almost his whole life, he usually helped the orphan caregivers take care of the others, and he loved making the children happy. but even so, he was not happy himself, and he practically blamed himself for the death of his parents, Alexander walked into the bathroom breathing heavily after having a memory-or dream- of his-now-dead parents, he clenched his teeth together in an angry manner, and banged his hand on the sink,” why me…….why couldn't my parents still be alive…” he whispered to himself “this is all my fault they wouldn't have died if I wasn't so useless……” he sighs shakily and turns so his back is on the sink and his face is turned to the toilet, -well I suppose its time to wake the kids up- he thinks, he then walks to his closet and takes out a black shirt and some saggy camo pants,” is this the best I can do?” he sighs then shrugs and walks out and into the room where the children were it was huge with plenty bed on each side of the room, a chandelier in the middle of the ceiling, one way in and one way out, and one window on each side of the room,” ALRIGHT EVERYONE TIME TO WAKE UP!!!!” he screams,the kids groan as they wake up,wiping their eyes,he smiles to himself happy that at himself,one of the kids were wide awake in a few seconds,the child jumps out of bed and runs to alexander “hello,how are you mr watson!”
Alexander smiled at the child “im doing quite well lily.” ‘lily’ was the childs name and one of his favorite kids,of course he couldnt have just one favorite child when their were thousands of other kids!,he picked lily up and placed her on his shoulders,”now then little one what do we do next?” she put her finger on her chin in a comical thinking way that made me chuckle,she smiled,”get dressed?” she looked down at me with her big blue eyes,her blond hair falling down like a curtain around her face,it almost matched the color of her pale white skin,”correct! C’mon little blueberry” i took her off my shoulders and put her down on the bed,she jumped on it a bit before sitting down “mr watson?” Alexander turned around to see a women,about 5-5’7 feet short black hair,brown eyes,and glasses,she smiled at me “your mister watson am i right?” he smiled “yes i am, what do you need?” she nervously fixed her glasses and held out a letter

pt 2 coming soon if you like it😭

Answer 1

nice i like the detail added in the story

Answer 2

Dont do a part two. Write a new story!

Answer 3

i like it, Great job.😄

Answer 4

lol

Answer 5

Lol.

Answer 6

lmao

Answer 7

W

Answer 8

nice story

Answer 9

ty all