Question

It's another song I had in mind (please no negative comments)
I walk through the rain at night as the wind blows hard and the rain pours down on me..just thinking about all the things I could of done for her now I feel guilty cause I couldn't save her. All she asked was to go out and eat but she fainted (fainted) I called the ambulance and they took her to a nearby hospital...I saw her body laying on the bed worrying for my sweet girl, I thought they could bring her back but it was to late..As I'm crying through the rain and the loud thunder..I still feel guilty of my actions.

Answer 1

It's cool ig, it feels more like a story rather than a song, maybe you could do better with story writing? idk tho.

Answer 2

Good suggestion I'm trying my hardest to become a singer/beatboxer

Answer 3

:)

Answer 4

This does sound more like it could be a story but it's good.

Answer 5

It's good you should write for a director movie.

Answer 6

Thank you all very much

Answer 7

I think this would work better as a poem personally. you definitely could shape it into a song tho :)

Answer 8

nice

Answer 9

This is good