I didn't fall in love with you because I needed you or that I wanted someone to hold or that I needed you to make me feel loved I fell in love with you because the moment I met you everything stopped the sounds around us were muted all I could hear was your voice and everytime I started into your eyes I felt home and I had no other thought in the world but how can I make you happy for the rest of your life because you were already doing so much for me and you didn't even know it but as time went on you slowly started dirfting away and the worst part of it was I knew and I couldn't do anything to stop it from happening you were gone but she will always have a place in my heart forever whether I want It to or not

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euphoriiic · Answer

this is so real, I love it smm. good jobb 🤗.

Luigi0210 · Answer

We learn to move on eventually

qiqi · Answer

Not to be a Pizza, but since this is under the writing subject section in a study site, I'll assume that you are looking for a feedback. So here's a constructive feedback:

- Punctuation, readers can't hold their breath for that long while reading all that. 
- Points of view, you mostly used 2nd-person of view then suddenly a 3rd-person point of view. The inconsistency makes it a bit confusing, making it sound that the writer is moving from two different people. 
- It would be best if you target a specific type of writing as it would help the readers get the message of the paragraph.

Hope this helps.

euphoriiic · Answer

skull.

doom2284 · Answer

@qiqi wrote:

Not to be a Pizza, but since this is under the writing subject section in a study site, I'll assume that you are looking for a feedback. So here's a constructive feedback: - Punctuation, readers can't hold their breath for that long while reading all that. - Points of view, you mostly used 2nd-person of view then suddenly a 3rd-person point of view. The inconsistency makes it a bit confusing, making it sound that the writer is moving from two different people. - It would be best if you target a specific type of writing as it would help the readers get the message of the paragraph. Hope this helps.

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OLIVER69 · Answer

I'm just gonna say it. He or she didn't write this. I think this post is more of like a heartfelt post. Because I've seen videos on youtube and tik tok, word for word. And if you're saying you wrote this then you're lying. But I will agree that it is a heartfelt post but please credit where you got this from. Because you didn't write this yourself. Just being honest.

xXAikoXx · Answer

@jayfafr um I seen this someewhereeee