This is a poem I been working on the last few days lmk what y'all think please

Do you love me, no
Do hate me, yes
This is just the way I feel, always in this broken cell
Nothing ever fixes the ditches
In this cold hearted world nothing but hurt happens
everything around me blackens
Do you love me, no
Do you hate me, yes
I've always been in the darkest part of my brain
This depressing feeling never goes away

Just make the pain go away
This misery is a trickery in my brain
The hate I feel from you is nothing new
We can't keep putting glue on these cracks
Never knew this would keep on
I am not a fan of this game you are playing
It's just a mind game, your hate brings me pain, breaks me down
The trickery is plain
You have no game
It's just the screaming in the brain
Crying is the pain

Do you love me, no of course not
Do you hate me, yeah you do
This is never new
You cuss me out, you threw me out
Left me with a crack that will never heal
So just leave me in this cell

Question

This is a poem I been working on the last few days lmk what y'all think please

Do you love me, no
Do hate me, yes
This is just the way I feel, always in this broken cell
Nothing ever fixes the ditches
In this cold hearted world nothing but hurt happens 
everything around me blackens 
Do you love me, no
Do you hate me, yes
I've always been in the darkest part of my brain 
This depressing feeling never goes away

Just make the pain go away
This misery is a trickery in my brain
The hate I feel from you is nothing new
We can't keep putting glue on these cracks
Never knew this would keep on 
I am not a fan of this game you are playing 
It's just a mind game, your hate brings me pain, breaks me down
The trickery is plain 
You have no game 
It's just the screaming in the brain
Crying is the pain

Do you love me, no of course not 
Do you hate me, yeah you do 
This is never new 
You cuss me out, you threw me out 
Left me with a crack that will never heal
So just leave me in this cell

Bones · Answer

@oliver69 @jayfafr @alexis1415

jayfafr · Answer

this is good good job!

Bones · Answer

@jayfafr wrote:

this is good good job!

Thank you

luhivqqcherry · Answer

i love yr poem , its super good and detailed🐰🎀

Bones · Answer

@luhivqqcherry wrote:

i love yr poem , its super good and detailed🐰🎀

Thank you

Alexis1415 · Answer

I love it very much, Very relatable sometimes

Bones · Answer

@alexis1415 wrote:

I love it very much, Very relatable sometimes

It's just how I feel sometimes like I am trapped in a endless circle or madness

Breathless · Answer

good job ;p

Bones · Answer

@breathless wrote:

good job ;p

Thank you

Breathless · Answer

Your welcome

Breathless · Answer

Btw do more expression ;3

Bones · Answer

@breathless wrote:

Btw do more expression ;3

Kk

Breathless · Answer

;p

OLIVER69 · Answer

You know I love this bestie. And like I said before this poem I can really feel  the emotion and depth behind it. This is a really good poem and I hope you write more.

mrfunnybunny · Answer

coolio

StevenisGhost · Answer

OMG IS SO GOOD! keep going.

Bones · Answer

@oliver69 wrote:

You know I love this bestie. And like I said before this poem I can really feel the emotion and depth behind it. This is a really good poem and I hope you write more.

Thank you bestie and I know, I might make more who knows lol

Bones · Answer

@stevenisghost wrote:

OMG IS SO GOOD! keep going.

Thank you

Breathless · Answer

WOmp

MAGABACK · Answer

I think it good. keep at at. ^^

Bones · Answer

@magaback wrote:

I think it good. keep at at. ^^

Thank you

JustElla · Answer

yayyy its so good

Bones · Answer

@justella wrote:

yayyy its so good

Thank you

SeeSerialCereal · Answer

your poem is amazing. it really hit home for me. the way you captured those feelings is incredible.

Bones · Answer

@seeserialcereal wrote:

your poem is amazing. it really hit home for me. the way you captured those feelings is incredible.

Thank you, I made this for my ex boyfriend and he hates it

SeeSerialCereal · Answer

i'm really sorry about that but hey don't listen to him do not let him take away the effort and the emotion you have put into this poem. i really like it i think it is really good. :)

Bones · Answer

@seeserialcereal wrote:

i'm really sorry about that but hey don't listen to him do not let him take away the effort and the emotion you have put into this poem. i really like it i think it is really good. :)

No that's a good thing lol

SeeSerialCereal · Answer

lol oh yeah right i get it now

heavenly · Answer

It is cool

Bones · Answer

@heavenly wrote:

It is cool

Thank you

heavenly · Answer

Yw

Bounty · Answer

Deep

Breathless · Answer

@bounty wrote:

Deep

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Bones · Answer

@bounty wrote:

Deep

Thanks

cora1 · Answer

i love it, very deep but lovely

Bones · Answer

@cora1 wrote:

i love it, very deep but lovely

Thank you

Arianna676 · Answer

I love it, very deep but lovely

Bones · Answer

@arianna676 wrote:

I love it, very deep but lovely

Thank you

pennalopee · Answer

You did a wonderful job keep up the good work!

Bones · Answer

@pennalopee wrote:

You did a wonderful job keep up the good work!

Thank you so much

pennalopee · Answer

@bones wrote:

@pennalopee wrote:

You did a wonderful job keep up the good work!

Thank you so much

You're welcome