Hey y'all. I'm just throwing out things that pop in my mind. I don't know what to call this yet,.but I'm sure it's garbage.

When you think your whole life is a lie,
You can't deny
That you were right.
You find out that you weren't made for something that everyone has.
You just need to pass.
Your life ain't a lie, you just weren't made right.
Everything that happened was just a test,
To see if you could be the best.

I tried to do my best.
To show you that I love you.
But I can't tell if it worked,
cause you never talked told me if we would work.
Your eyes are full of sorrow,
The sadness is unbreakable.
Your voice is sweet, and your heart is pure.

You need to learn
How to talk to me.
I can't help you
If your full of silence.
It just like science.

Love is like chemistry
Sometimes the combinations work
Sometimes they blow up in your face.
But bay, I want to make it work
I want to see the love on your face.

Question

Hey y'all. I'm just throwing out things that pop in my mind. I don't know what to call this yet,.but I'm sure it's garbage.

When you think your whole life is a lie,
You can't deny
That you were right.
You find out that you weren't made for something that everyone has.
You just need to pass.
Your life ain't a lie, you just weren't made right.
Everything that happened was just a test,
To see if you could be the best.

I tried to do my best.
To show you that I love you.
But I can't tell if it worked,
 cause you never talked told me if we would work.
Your eyes are full of sorrow,
The sadness is unbreakable.
Your voice is sweet, and your heart is pure.

You need to learn
How to talk to me.
I can't help you
If your full of silence.
It just like science.

Love is like chemistry
Sometimes the combinations work
Sometimes they blow up in your face.
But bay, I want to make it work
I want to see the love on your face.

StevenisGhost · Answer

I LOVE IT SO SO MUCH!!!!!!

NevadaBoi · Answer

@stevenisghost wrote:

I LOVE IT SO SO MUCH!!!!!!

Thank you! I have had so much on my mind that I had to get some off my chest.

cora1 · Answer

its good

NevadaBoi · Answer

@cora1 wrote:

its good

Thank you.

OLIVER69 · Answer

I am really about to strangle you, but this is good. Also this line right here, "But bay, I want to make it work" it's good, but I don't think you mean bay, because bay means a broad inlet of the sea where the land curves inward. But I think you mean "But bae, I want to make it work." Since bae is another term for baby. Although you could use baby and it'd me kind of cute and like a little more wholesome. But hey I love this so far

NevadaBoi · Answer

@oliver69 wrote:

I am really about to strangle you, but this is good. Also this line right here, "But bay, I want to make it work" it's good, but I don't think you mean bay, because bay means a broad inlet of the sea where the land curves inward. But I think you mean "But bae, I want to make it work." Since bae is another term for baby. Although you could use baby and it'd me kind of cute and like a little more wholesome. But hey I love this so far

It's a work in progress. I just wanted to put it down before I forgot.

NevadaBoi · Answer

I already found a few things I want to change.

OLIVER69 · Answer

Ooo I forgot to add since this is technically a work in progress like I read, I'm just giving feedback, but anyways for the name, you could do, "Broken together", "fighting for love" or "Forever in my heart." I like helping so maybe I gave you ideas

NevadaBoi · Answer

@oliver69 wrote:

Ooo I forgot to add since this is technically a work in progress like I read, I'm just giving feedback, but anyways for the name, you could do, "Broken together", "fighting for love" or "Forever in my heart." I like helping so maybe I gave you ideas

Maybe one of these days we can vc and work on it together

OLIVER69 · Answer

@nevadaboi wrote:

@oliver69 wrote:

Ooo I forgot to add since this is technically a work in progress like I read, I'm just giving feedback, but anyways for the name, you could do, "Broken together", "fighting for love" or "Forever in my heart." I like helping so maybe I gave you ideas

Maybe one of these days we can vc and work on it together

Yeah maybe. I just like helping in general

Ylynnaa · Answer

LOOKS GOOD I LIKE IT🔥🔥 !!!

Bones · Answer

It is good, good job on this ✨

KatelynGrace · Answer

nice keep it up

Beanie · Answer

That's really good! Will you tag me in your next poem?

Breathless · Answer

it works

StevenisGhost · Answer

that's good

kamariana · Answer

Real.

YouInFocus · Answer

wow this is really a great poem captures the feelings of misunderstanding and love. :D

KBaby · Answer

i really like it you tryna express your feelings and your love

2hrs · Answer

Erm what the sigma

AcornTheNut · Answer

this reminds me of a roblox game

sllo · Answer

Its rlly giving

PARDYALONE · Answer

That's really good love, keep up the great work🤧

Exile · Answer

Very well written! Great Job!! 🤍

MysticEcho · Answer

not garbage!!!!

ihy · Answer

Nice Job!

grimreaper124 · Answer

nice

cherryblossom999 · Answer

nicee

Gdub08 · Answer

WS fr dude

Gdub08 · Answer

Nice work