Luldam2007:
Yall give me some feedback on this intro to a song that I'm writng her penultimate sighs called softly on the kindling winds, her saintly eyes filling with tears lifted with truth, then a golden flash like the onset of heaven, leaving her screams breaking my heart and in the grip of fire i knew the death of love
Bones:
It kinda reminds me of a short story also you might want to add more to it but so far it's good
Bones:
Good job✨
Luldam2007:
thx man greatly appreciate the feedback
Bones:
Alexis1415:
I agree with bones, at the moment it sounds more of a story or a poem more than a song, but I bet you will be improving greatly, honestly looking at lyrics from popular songs would be good feedback for yourself, seeing how you could improve
Luldam2007:
Alexis1415:
Luldam2007:
it is called the death of love by cradle of filth the intro is the intro to that song
Alexis1415:
Ohh I see, very good choice for inspiration to be honest!
Luldam2007:
thank you
ihy:
It's good, keep up the good work!
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