Question

Guys, I'm doing an original song for my school's talent show, is the lyrics too dark?
Your eyes is like the see but only clearer
It’s beautiful
Your like a dandelion blowing in the spring
Knocked me off my feet
But loving you comes with a price
Who is she
I missed my chance
Now I got to care

I love you
And I want to shout it out
I’ll never stop till I make you mine
It’s a pitiful thing to say
But I don’t care cause your mine
Gonna make you mine
Your mine
Dear god
Gonna make you mine
Your mine
Dear god
Gonna make you mine

I known you for 4 years
Aint that long
I took care of you when you got sick
Aint that sweet
But meeting her for the first time
Where was was she
Now I got to fight for what’s mine

I love you
And I want to shout it out
I’ll never stop till I make you mine
It’s a pitiful thing to say
But I don’t care cause your mine
Gonna make you mine
Your mine
Dear god
Gonna make you mine
Your mine
Dear god
Gonna make you mine

I will sacifice every thing
Even if it hurt me
I will love and make it right
Even it it kills me
You belong to me not her
You’ll have my back protecting you from her
Cause I love you

I love you
And I want to shout it out (Oh my god I love you)
I’ll never stop till I make you mine (Yeah your Wizarding mine)
It’s a pitiful thing to say (Indeed)
But I don’t care cause your mine
Gonna make you mine
Your mine
Dear god
Gonna make you mine
Your mine
Dear god
Gonna make you mine

Answer 1

so sigma

Answer 2

so skbidi !

Answer 3

some teachers play songs worse than this during transitions 💀 I think you're all good here

Answer 4

Its a w

Answer 5

i think working on the grammar a bit would be a nice touch, read it outloud and then see how you like the flow if it and fix as needed.