Here is a song I made tell me if it needs any corrections

Every single night I find
You there in the back of my mind
And I can't ever get you out
All I can do is scream and shout

And every time I see you
I don't ever know what to do
But I don't need you

Please get outta my head
I need to go to bed
When I close my eyes
I can only see you
I don't need you there in the back of my eyes
Please let me to x2

I try to find the peace inside
Cuz I don't have a place to hide
I think I need some help
Please get outta my head
I need to go to bed
When I close my eyes
I can only see you
I don't need you there in the back of my eyes
It's time for me to move on
Get a therapist and get some help

Please get outta my head
I need to go to bed
When I close my eyes
I can only see you
I don't need you there in the back of my eyes
Please let me to x2

Every single night I find
You there in the back of my mind
Please let me go

Question

Here is a song I made tell me if it needs any corrections

Every single night I find 
You there in the back of my mind
And I can't ever get you out
All I can do is scream and shout

And every time I see you
I don't ever know what to do
But I don't need you

Please get outta my head
I need to go to bed
When I close my eyes
I can only see you
I don't need you there in the back of my eyes
Please let me to x2

I try to find the peace inside
Cuz I don't have a place to hide 
I think I need some help
Please get outta my head
I need to go to bed
When I close my eyes
I can only see you
I don't need you there in the back of my eyes
It's time for me to move on 
Get a therapist and get some help

Please get outta my head
I need to go to bed
When I close my eyes 
I can only see you
I don't need you there in the back of my eyes
Please let me to x2

Every single night I find
You there in the back of my mind
Please let me go

Lilly2010 · Answer

That is a really good song if i'm being honest. If that's how you feel then you shouldn't need to correct it. Even if it wasn't something personal to you, i still think you don't need any corrections done :)

quackers4life · Answer

@lilly2010 wrote:

That is a really good song if i'm being honest. If that's how you feel then you shouldn't need to correct it. Even if it wasn't something personal to you, i still think you don't need any corrections done :)

Thx

Lilly2010 · Answer

@quackers4life wrote:

@lilly2010 wrote:

That is a really good song if i'm being honest. If that's how you feel then you shouldn't need to correct it. Even if it wasn't something personal to you, i still think you don't need any corrections done :)

Thx

np

PureSoulless · Answer

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uknownprttyfacekayla · Answer

This is good jj good job

quackers4life · Answer

@uknownprttyfacekayla wrote:

This is good jj good job

Thx

AcornTheNut · Answer

I looked over it, and it looks all good,,,, so maybe you should upload it to SoundCloud?

CherryLover · Answer

nice lyrics!

NoLevel · Answer

You got a beat for it?

quackers4life · Answer

Not yet

NoLevel · Answer

@quackers4life wrote:

Not yet

low-key bro I aint gon lie. you normally need to find a beat first to match w the flow but its how u wanna do it

quackers4life · Answer

@nolevel wrote:

@quackers4life wrote:

Not yet

low-key bro I aint gon lie. you normally need to find a beat first to match w the flow but its how u wanna do it

Yeah I can make a beat but don't have the stuff

EpicPrinceVibes · Answer

i mean it sounds awesome overall but the only thing i would change is to fix "Please let me to" to "Please let me go" but yeah it is so good!

NoLevel · Answer

@quackers4life wrote:

@nolevel wrote:

@quackers4life wrote:

Not yet

low-key bro I aint gon lie. you normally need to find a beat first to match w the flow but its how u wanna do it

Yeah I can make a beat but don't have the stuff

or find one off youtube

quackers4life · Answer

Tru

Rileyy78 · Answer

I love it

forgetmylife · Answer

good song

forgetmylife · Answer

lemme do a remix

quackers4life · Answer

@forgetmylife wrote:

lemme do a remix

Go ahead

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