Question

I'm writing a pargraph for chemistry class.

Do i need to improve any writing? Taco bell -,Make sure food is not underlie cooked that can cause contamination with food/check suppliers food (Because pathogenic bacteria can be in it due to poorly cleaning the transportation ) When food goes to transportation they make sure to rinse them through and check any meat for spoilage and keep meat a certain temperature approximately 135 degree fahrenheit. Before giving it producers transporters repackage and store the food to make sure to keep any pathogenic bacteria from spreading or entering any of the valuable food/necessities also make sure to label each food supplement before packaging this helps keep everything in order.Store raw meats away from ready-to eat food so they don’t cross contaminate.Make sure all the container are fully sealed and make sure there is no leakage or overpacking.Make sure to clean storage areas before and after to reduce the cause of containtinon spread.Don’t overload meats because it can lead to getting punctured and leaking causing bacteria spreading.Also make sure to wash hands and wash products before using.And make sure to clean cooking utensils before and after usages.Make sure stoves and ovens are set to a certain temperature to not create bacteria spreadage.Do not cook with other food products touching together this could contaminate the products and cause bacteria on to the food.Other ways to reduce contamination wash hands,wash countertops,wash dishes/serving material before and after usage.Make sure to wear gloves,hairnets and aprons (If required too) and other ways to reduce the risk of contamination is to to clean anything that is needed/used for preparing the food for customers




The transportation needs to make sure none of the containers have any bacteria or germs in it. If so, toss the food out and clean out the infected areas until clean.(producers need to make sure transportation doesn't give them spoiled food/undercooked meats or the wrong products.)




The producers need to make sure the transportation was inspected by the FDA before handing over the food due to some transporters giving spoiled meat and other spoiled/hazardous food.

Answer 1

@luhivqqcherry do you think I need to improvise my writing?

Answer 2

Taco bell is booty

Answer 3

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Answer 4

I forgot youre name

Answer 5

your writing is very good but it could use some improvements. there should be spaces after all of your commas, that makes it more readable, also I feel like instead of making it all one big thing you should organize by making small sections. I made some of my own versions. now you don't have to use them, those are just ideas to improve the paragraph(s) to be more understandable, I also reduced some of the repeated phrases to!

Taco bell

Original - Make sure food is not underlie cooked that can cause contamination with food/check suppliers food (Because pathogenic bacteria can be in it due to poorly cleaning the transportation).

My version - Make sure that the food is not under cooked, as that could cause contamination, also always check suppliers and their food that may have pathogenic bacteria due too unclean transportation.

Original - When food goes to transportation they make sure to rinse them through and check any meat for spoilage and keep meat at a certain temperature approximately 135 degree Fahrenheit.

my version - During transportation, the suppliers should rinse through the food, and all the meat should be checked for any type of spoilage while still maintaining a temperature of 135 degrees Fahrenheit.

Original - Before giving it producers transporters repackage and store the food to make sure to keep any pathogenic bacteria from spreading or entering any of the valuable food/necessities also make sure to label each food supplement before packaging this helps keep everything in order.

(for this i switched it up just a little because this sentence is unclear, the run off sentence and the roles in this didn't make any sense so if i got anything wrong correct me.)

my version - The producers must make sure that the transporters repackage and store the food to keep/prevent pathogenic bacteria from spreading, as well as labeling each item before packaging as that helps to keep everything arranged correctly.

Original - Store raw meats away from ready-to eat food so they don’t cross contaminate. Make sure all the containers are fully sealed and make sure there is no leakage or over packing. Make sure to clean storage areas before and after to reduce the cause of contamination spread.

my version - store away raw meats separately from ready-to-eat foods to prevent any cross contamination, also ensure all containers are completely sealed, with no leakage or over packing. clean storage areas before and after to minimize contamination spreading.

Original - Don’t overload meats because it can lead to getting punctured and leaking causing bacteria spreading. Also make sure to wash hands and wash products before using. make sure to clean cooking utensils before and after usage. Make sure stoves and ovens are set to a certain temperature to not create bacteria spreadage. Do not cook with other food products touching together this could contaminate the products and cause bacteria on to the food.

my version - Do not overload meats, as that can cause puncturing and leaking, leading for bacteria to spread. Always wash your hands and wash the products before use, and be sure to clean cooking utensils before and after usage. Ensure stoves and ovens are set to a certain temp. to stop any bacteria, also do not cook with different food products together, as contact can cause contamination in the product.

Original - Other ways to reduce contamination wash hands, wash counter tops, wash dishes/serving material before and after usage. Make sure to wear gloves and hairnets and aprons (If required too) and other ways to reduce the risk of contamination is to to clean anything that is needed/used for preparing the food for customers.

my version - Other ways to reduce contamination is to wash your hands, counter tops, and dishes or serving material before and after usage, wear gloves, hairnets, and aprons if wanted. to decrease the risk of contamination, clean your equipment and all of the surfaces around used to prepare food.

Answer 6

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Answer 7

To prevent contamination, ensure food, especially meat, is cooked properly and stored at 135°F. Check suppliers for spoilage, and always wash hands, utensils, and surfaces. Store raw meat separately and seal containers to avoid leaks.