Question

My first poem on hear. Opinions??

Once apon a time there lived a girl who thought he was the only one.
She thought he was sweet, kind,smart, loving and so so fun.

She was blinded.
She knew he was burdend, but she thought she could find him.

She thought she could fix him.
She thought she could win.

But he is lost.
She thought she could fix him, but at what cost.

Now they are both hurt.
She tried so hard, that soon she was so broken it put her in the dirt.

He says he's sorry now.
He says he'll try to do better.
But she's not comming around.
There's a letter.

It says shes tired.
it says all she wanted was his desire.

For her.
And only her.
He's broken.
His heart has been stolen.

He says "You can rest now"
He says it as a vow.

Hope you enjoyed

Answer 1

this atee

Answer 2

good job on this.. very nice

Answer 3

this is good u did good on this

Answer 4

i really like the poem!!! 😊🌸

Answer 5

smells like wood

Answer 6

9/10

Answer 7

for ur first poem, not bad at all bro, 8.5/10

Answer 8

W first poem bro

Answer 9

keep doing whatchu doing