Question

( rate this poem i made )

im walking down that old dirt road
hidden by the trees in that field we use to roam.
lying through my teeth so I don't let you see
that I am breaking underneath
as you look in my eyes, what do you see?
a sad little girl? or a child who misses her friend.
you say I'm over reacting, but am I?
why must I cry for you to see
you hurt me, more than enough.
so I ask, why..
why must I cry.

Answer 1

i am looking for critism and also some good aspects of what I wrote, so please! any advice is good!

Answer 2

awww

Answer 3

why do i feel this

Answer 4

W poem my friend

Answer 5

feltttt

Answer 6

can you write a poem for me personally ?

Answer 7

can it perhaps be Abt the empty void I feel in my heart since my woman left me?

Answer 8

Wwww

Answer 9

how do I dm? im a lil slow fr

Answer 10

oh otay

Answer 11

okay*** typo

Answer 12

It’s okay

Answer 13

Niicccceee

Answer 14

Sounds like a country song

Answer 15

w country

Answer 16

8/10

Answer 17

10/10

Answer 18

amazing poem
you have skills and you should write more poems. overall you are talented girly