Question

Hi, this is something I wrote last year as a freshman.

"My first regular-length song, by Rari. I have been working on this during my Journalism classes. Please give me your honest feedback. Love you guys! :)

in the depths of the city, where shadows creep
there's a story unfolding, secrets they keep
I can hear brothas voices through these concrete streets
Where guns are the currency and killers run deep
In this world of darkness, where danger's near, they're chasing that money, they'll do what it takes, but in this twisted reality, there's no escape.

They're living on the edge, always on the run
A life full of danger, with nowhere to turn
They speak with their actions, silence speaks louder than words
In this deadly ballet, where lines are blurred

Guns blazing, bullets flying, hearts racing in the night
Money goin', bodies falling, as they fight for their life
This is the game they play, where only the strong survive
In this world of hurt, where nobody can hide

Caught in the crossfire of power and greed
They're trapped in a cycle that never recedes
The streets are their battlefield, a constant war zone
But deep down inside, they just want to find home

Amidst the chaos, there are stories untold
Of individuals caught up in this world so cold
Some forced into it by circumstance or fate Others seeking a sense of belonging, to escape their own slate

But behind every trigger pulled and every life lost
There's a web of pain and despair, a great cost
The victims extend beyond those who fall in the fray The families shattered, the innocents become dirt, like, swept away

Guns blazing, bullets flying, hearts racing in the night Money flowing, bodies falling, as they fight for their life This is the game they play, where only the strong survive In this world of war, survival becomes the ultimate prize"

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Answer 1

i like it. read it in the tune of "WALK AWAY" by red leather.

Answer 2

Not EXACTLY my kind of music but it's good