I was feeling a bit down so I turned to writing how I felt down and made something out of it. These lyrics are in no way done and as you can tell and there pretty depressinging. I'm trying to get some opinions on it, maybe if anyone wants to hop on the song with me to work and finish it I'd be open. This is what I got so far.

I’m so lonely, always find myself dancing with nobody
This silence is my symphony, who needs love when you have self pity in your heart
I never asked for many things, just a clean start
To understand why I’m like this, cause really I hate this life, yeah

Someone please try and help me realize why I can’t fit in
I’m not okay, why don't you see it? All the tears that fall down my face?
Romantic homicide I keep on replay, depression keeps on digging my grave
I say I don’t wanna die, so why did thoughts of it cross my mind?

It needs a chorus and I haven't made any beats to go with it yet. just let me know what you think, and pms are open for colabs.

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I was feeling a bit down so I turned to writing how I felt down and made something out of it. These lyrics are in no way done and as you can tell and there pretty depressinging. I'm trying to get some opinions on it, maybe if anyone wants to hop on the song with me to work and finish it I'd be open. This is what I got so far.

I’m so lonely, always find myself dancing with nobody 
This silence is my symphony, who needs love when you have self pity in your heart
I never asked for many things, just a clean start
To understand why I’m like this, cause really I hate this life, yeah

Someone please try and help me realize why I can’t fit in
I’m not okay, why don't you see it? All the tears that fall down my face?
Romantic homicide I keep on replay, depression keeps on digging my grave 
I say I don’t wanna die, so why did thoughts of it cross my mind?

It needs a chorus and I haven't made any beats to go with it yet. just let me know what you think, and pms are open for colabs.

SaltySuga · Answer

Wow wow wow we cheer this is awesome

scarlettmiris · Answer

This is really good so far, and relatable.

iluvpanda · Answer

i felt da emotion in this, it's powerful. the line "i've never asked for many things, just a clean start" resonated wit me. having to constantly fix urself n prove ur no longer what u were but there's always smb trying to remind u. the line "This silence is my symphony, who needs love when you have self pity in your heart" rlly meant a lot, i cant wait to see the finished results.

MaxTon · Answer

@saltysuga wrote:

Wow wow wow we cheer this is awesome

Thank you

MaxTon · Answer

@scarlettmiris wrote:

This is really good so far, and relatable.

Thank you, I think it's a decent start

theydontknowmelly · Answer

this is touching and really nice, I relate to it for the most part, I like how you said "I've never asked for many things, Just a clean start'' this is real n really felt.  You did a good job on this, keep it up

MaxTon · Answer

@iluvpanda wrote:

i felt da emotion in this, it's powerful. the line "i've never asked for many things, just a clean start" resonated wit me. having to constantly fix urself n prove ur no longer what u were but there's always smb trying to remind u. the line "This silence is my symphony, who needs love when you have self pity in your heart" rlly meant a lot, i cant wait to see the finished results.

Hey! thanks for the feed back it's always welcomed, I'm happy you could relate and find some meaning in my music. When I finish the song I'll be sure to let you know so you can give it a listen

MaxTon · Answer

@theydontknowmelly wrote:

this is touching and really nice, I relate to it for the most part, I like how you said "I've never asked for many things, Just a clean start'' this is real n really felt. You did a good job on this, keep it up

Thank you so much, I appreciate your feed back on my song lol. I think that sometimes we all wish we could start over with that fresh start and not be haunted by our past mistakes and failures in life. I think everyone should have a second chance, but sometimes I struggle with that.

theydontknowmelly · Answer

@maxton wrote:

@theydontknowmelly wrote:

this is touching and really nice, I relate to it for the most part, I like how you said "I've never asked for many things, Just a clean start'' this is real n really felt. You did a good job on this, keep it up

Thank you so much, I appreciate your feed back on my song lol. I think that sometimes we all wish we could start over with that fresh start and not be haunted by our past mistakes and failures in life. I think everyone should have a second chance, but sometimes I struggle with that.

Yeah its reality,we learned from it too and we wish to go back and fix things but we can't. So we get back up and try again and make a better choice for yourself, it honestly takes time if your doing the right thing and making yourself feel better, a lot of people struggle with this and it's just how it is, I'm sure you'll find your way.

Ashlynisback · Answer

can i make like a beat to it like sum guitar and stuff

MaxTon · Answer

@ashlynisback wrote:

can i make like a beat to it like sum guitar and stuff

Go for it bro

Ashlynisback · Answer

bettttt

iluvpanda · Answer

@maxton wrote:

@iluvpanda wrote:

i felt da emotion in this, it's powerful. the line "i've never asked for many things, just a clean start" resonated wit me. having to constantly fix urself n prove ur no longer what u were but there's always smb trying to remind u. the line "This silence is my symphony, who needs love when you have self pity in your heart" rlly meant a lot, i cant wait to see the finished results.

Hey! thanks for the feed back it's always welcomed, I'm happy you could relate and find some meaning in my music. When I finish the song I'll be sure to let you know so you can give it a listen

tyy, i'll be lookin forward to it, good luck!

2hrs · Answer

Lovely!

Nitrox · Answer

this is beyond corny and cringey but hey dude good luck on the final result of your song

SPAMMER101 · Answer

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