Eclipsed by Shadow

Based off juice wrlds song already dead

In the echo of a hollow dawn,
I tread on dreams that feel so gone,
A ghost of laughter lost in despair,
I wear my grief like a heavy air.

Each heartbeat weighs like lead in my chest,
A silent war I cannot rest,
Eyes that glimmer, yet see no day,
Searching for light in a world of gray.

Memories haunt like a bitter ghost,
Moments of joy that feel like a boast,
Trapped in a cycle of endless night,
Fighting a battle with fading light.

A mask I wear, cracked and stained,
Hiding a soul that feels so pained,
Every “I’m fine” a desperate lie,
Behind the facade, I silently cry.

The weight of the past, it clings like sin,
A tapestry woven with threads of the grim,
Wishing for peace, but finding regret,
A heart that’s heavy with love unmet.

In shadows where echoes softly tread,
I whisper truths that I fear to shed,
For in this life, I find no reprieve,
Just lessons learned but never believed.

So here I linger, in moments I dread,
With a heart that feels already dead,
Yet even in darkness, I still reach out,
For a flicker of hope amidst all the doubt.

Question

Eclipsed by Shadow

Based off juice wrlds song already dead

In the echo of a hollow dawn,  
I tread on dreams that feel so gone,  
A ghost of laughter lost in despair,  
I wear my grief like a heavy air.

Each heartbeat weighs like lead in my chest,  
A silent war I cannot rest,  
Eyes that glimmer, yet see no day,  
Searching for light in a world of gray.

Memories haunt like a bitter ghost,  
Moments of joy that feel like a boast,  
Trapped in a cycle of endless night,  
Fighting a battle with fading light.

A mask I wear, cracked and stained,  
Hiding a soul that feels so pained,  
Every “I’m fine” a desperate lie,  
Behind the facade, I silently cry.

The weight of the past, it clings like sin,  
A tapestry woven with threads of the grim,  
Wishing for peace, but finding regret,  
A heart that’s heavy with love unmet.

In shadows where echoes softly tread,  
I whisper truths that I fear to shed,  
For in this life, I find no reprieve,  
Just lessons learned but never believed.

So here I linger, in moments I dread,  
With a heart that feels already dead,  
Yet even in darkness, I still reach out,  
For a flicker of hope amidst all the doubt.

forgetmylife · Answer

Feel free to comment, please don’t spam go off topic or argue. If you have a comment make sure it’s feedback about the poem not anything else. If you don’t have a comment don’t comment simple as that. If I see spamming I’ll just close the post. Thank you and feel free to let me know what’s your thoughts about this, if you guys like it I’ll keep making more.

Addif9911 · Answer

This is really good Nas, Ily and keep going♡

unknownnnnnn · Answer

this is heavy, but the honesty is beautiful. You put feelings into words that most people can’t even admit to themselves. Even in all that darkness, you can still hear the strength in you, the part that refuses to give up. I’m proud of you for letting it out. keep it up man

forgetmylife · Answer

@addif9911 wrote:

This is really good Nas, Ily and keep going♡

Thank you addi

forgetmylife · Answer

@unknownnnnnn wrote:

this is heavy, but the honesty is beautiful. You put feelings into words that most people can’t even admit to themselves. Even in all that darkness, you can still hear the strength in you, the part that refuses to give up. I’m proud of you for letting it out. keep it up man

Thank you jazzy your feedback is really thoughtful and appreciated

unknownnnnnn · Answer

@forgetmylife wrote:

@unknownnnnnn wrote:

this is heavy, but the honesty is beautiful. You put feelings into words that most people can’t even admit to themselves. Even in all that darkness, you can still hear the strength in you, the part that refuses to give up. I’m proud of you for letting it out. keep it up man

Thank you jazzy your feedback is really thoughtful and appreciated

your welcome!

Nina001 · Answer

this is one beautiful essay !!!!!!

forgetmylife · Answer

@nina001 wrote:

this is one beautiful essay !!!!!!

Thank you Nina 💞

Nina001 · Answer

@forgetmylife wrote:

@nina001 wrote:

this is one beautiful essay !!!!!!

Thank you Nina 💞

youre welcome

Nina001 · Answer

WAIT I SAID ESSAY??? I MEANT POEM

Nina001 · Answer

I was saying essay cuz I'm doing one

forgetmylife · Answer

@nina001 wrote:

WAIT I SAID ESSAY??? I MEANT POEM

I know what you meant 🤗

uknownprttyfacekayla · Answer

The feelings in this poem are very clear grief, numbness,regret, hiding pain,all expressed with honesty that's exactly what makes juice wrld's music hit and you captured that same emotional heaviness. The poem sits in the darkness which fits but adding even one brief of hope, anger, or longing can make the emotional arc hit harder. But good job nas I love it

forgetmylife · Answer

@uknownprttyfacekayla wrote:

The feelings in this poem are very clear grief, numbness,regret, hiding pain,all expressed with honesty that's exactly what makes juice wrld's music hit and you captured that same emotional heaviness. The poem sits in the darkness which fits but adding even one brief of hope, anger, or longing can make the emotional arc hit harder. But good job nas I love it

Well well good eye Abby I shall capture that in my next poem I have some more lined up. Thank you for your feedback 💞

idontexistrn1 · Answer

Ate that shi up