Imagine,
your first relationship,
your first experience,
ruined.

He held me close,
too close for comfort.
He held me tight,
so tight I couldn't breathe.

I begged him to stop,
never did he listen.
I was only good for one thing,
one thing that I hated.

He laughed when he hit me,
how was it funny?
Was it always a joke?
It just now "hit me."

When his hands were on me,
it wasn't "that's so cute."
More of a crime,
Help. I'm a person, too.

Was it control he wanted?
Or simply my body.
He never wanted me,
only a body.

"Only if you want to."
but that was never really true,
why wouldn't he stop?
help, I'm so blue.

Mr. Popular he was,
so no one ever knew.
How he touched me,
when I didn't ask him to.

My cries for help
were turned into rumors.
No one believed me,
they never even tried.

The week he left me,
he found someone new.
He treats her better,
does she not complain?

Imagine
my first relationship,
my first experience,
ruined.

Question

Imagine,
your first relationship, 
your first experience,
ruined.

He held me close,
too close for comfort.
He held me tight,
so tight I couldn't breathe.

I begged him to stop,
never did he listen.
I was only good for one thing,
one thing that I hated.

He laughed when he hit me,
how was it funny?
Was it always a joke?
It just now "hit me."

When his hands were on me,
it wasn't "that's so cute."
More of a crime,
Help. I'm a person, too.

Was it control he wanted?
Or simply my body.
He never wanted me,
only a body.

"Only if you want to."
but that was never really true,
why wouldn't he stop?
help, I'm so blue.

Mr. Popular he was,
so no one ever knew.
How he touched me,
when I didn't ask him to.

My cries for help
were turned into rumors.
No one believed me,
they never even tried.

The week he left me,
he found someone new.
He treats her better,
does she not complain?

Imagine
my first relationship,
my first experience,
ruined.

Nina001 · Answer

Lovely written

cullenn · Answer

@nina001 wrote:

Lovely written

thank you! Theres a few parts I don't like but I cant figure out how to fix them lol so

forgetmylife · Answer

This is well written, good use of emotional intelligence and good execution of the message that your audience is receiving. And it’s crazy as to how relatable this is to me personally because it makes me feel like I’m being manipulated by someone who doesn’t want me around you know? Very good writing infinity out of infinity.

cullenn · Answer

@forgetmylife wrote:

This is well written, good use of emotional intelligence and good execution of the message that your audience is receiving. And it’s crazy as to how relatable this is to me personally because it makes me feel like I’m being manipulated by someone who doesn’t want me around you know? Very good writing infinity out of infinity.

thank you! it is about the physical abuse and stuff that my ex put me thru but idk if I executed that well

forgetmylife · Answer

@cullenn wrote:

@forgetmylife wrote:

This is well written, good use of emotional intelligence and good execution of the message that your audience is receiving. And it’s crazy as to how relatable this is to me personally because it makes me feel like I’m being manipulated by someone who doesn’t want me around you know? Very good writing infinity out of infinity.

thank you! it is about the physical abuse and stuff that my ex put me thru but idk if I executed that well

No you executed it really well

cullenn · Answer

@forgetmylife wrote:

@cullenn wrote:

@forgetmylife wrote:

This is well written, good use of emotional intelligence and good execution of the message that your audience is receiving. And it’s crazy as to how relatable this is to me personally because it makes me feel like I’m being manipulated by someone who doesn’t want me around you know? Very good writing infinity out of infinity.

thank you! it is about the physical abuse and stuff that my ex put me thru but idk if I executed that well

No you executed it really well

Tysm!

forgetmylife · Answer

@cullenn wrote:

@forgetmylife wrote:

@cullenn wrote:

@forgetmylife wrote:

This is well written, good use of emotional intelligence and good execution of the message that your audience is receiving. And it’s crazy as to how relatable this is to me personally because it makes me feel like I’m being manipulated by someone who doesn’t want me around you know? Very good writing infinity out of infinity.

thank you! it is about the physical abuse and stuff that my ex put me thru but idk if I executed that well

No you executed it really well

Tysm!

No problem!

SaltySuga · Answer

Yoo this is tuff keep up the good work