( two things i wrote)
Life is hard. you have to take care of yourself because if you dont who will. People always say this and that about friends, but in alot of scenarios where are they when your dying?, where are they when your homeless?, where were they when something bad happened and you needed a shoulder to cry on endlessly but couldnt because not even your own parents was there because they had always made you feel like you were the problem instead of the one helping the problem. This world is cruel now and all you can do is live on and only trust yourself and do your own thing. because change wont happen if you dont change and change can happen if you put in that effort for the change that is needed.

love is overrated, but love is also underrated. The heart speaks in many ways that maybe not even you can understaned until you find the right person that understands it. love isnt fake. love is something rare to find because alot of people nowadays cheat and leave you for others. but there are still good people that could be right for you. but how will you find out if all you know about love is "i got hurt", "last time they left me for others" , "they're gonna cheat again". the past is the past and theres nothing to it. Those "Exes" are nothing. They were just chapters in your life that showed you what will happen later on in your love life, and thats okay. all you can do is wait until you find the right one.

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( two things i wrote)                                                                                 
Life is hard. you have to take care of yourself because if you dont who will. People always say this and that about friends, but in alot of scenarios where are they when your dying?, where are they when your homeless?, where were they when something bad happened and you needed a shoulder to cry on endlessly but couldnt because not even your own parents was there because they had always made you feel like you were the problem instead of the one helping the problem. This world is cruel now and all you can do is live on and only trust yourself and do your own thing. because change wont happen if you dont change and change can happen if you put in that effort for the change that is needed.                                                             


love is overrated, but love is also underrated. The heart speaks in many ways that maybe not even you can understaned until you find the right person that understands it. love isnt fake. love is something rare to find because alot of people nowadays cheat and leave you for others. but there are still good people that could be right for you. but how will you find out if all you know about love is "i got hurt", "last time they left me for others" , "they're gonna cheat again". the past is the past and theres nothing to it. Those "Exes" are nothing. They were just chapters in your life that showed you what will happen later on in your love life, and thats okay. all you can do is wait until you find the right one.

MaxTon · Answer

Your writing shows strong emotion and real thoughts about life and love. In the first piece, you talk about how life can be cruel and how sometimes the people who are supposed to help aren’t there, which leads to the idea that you must rely on yourself and work to create change in your life. In the second piece, you explain that love can hurt and many people fear it because of past experiences, but love itself isn’t fake, it’s just rare, and the right person will understand your heart. Overall, I think your writing is honest and reflective, and with a little clearer structure and grammar, your message could become even stronger.