Question

Plese, rate this poem.

Iced Blood
I am a man who lives no love
my heart has a kind of steel
inside my veins runs iced blood
I don´t take account of how you feel.
There´s no any emotion
I always rather to live alone.
Once you were my sunrise
My sweet hopes and my ideals
I´d spend my times by your side
But your feelings weren´t real.
Now I understand that in the end the damage was done.
I am here with no fear of life,
If you were cold, now I am twofold
So there´s no sorrow, because you´re out of my world.

Answer 1

nice I rate it 10, 10is the highest

Answer 2

Great bheeelaat. you´re cool. Thanks.

Answer 3

welcome bro nice poem keep up

Answer 4

Not bad, but English needs correcting in a couple of places:

"There´s no any emotion" should be "There´s no emotion"
"I always rather to live alone" - "I would rather always live alone" or "I wish to always live alone" or maybe you mean "Oh, that I'd always lived alone!"
"I´d spend my times by your side" - "I'd spend my time by your side"

nice poem otherwise, but i hope it doesn't reflect you mental state of being!
good luck!

Answer 5

Great, Mangodurian. My english is bad because I´m not a native english speaker (I´m a brazilian). Thanks for corrections. By this way, I learn a little more. Thanks again. P.S: I am not a iced man, because of this I´ve written this poem.

Answer 6

good but try little less sadness