Question

Help me with my essay please check my grammar.
You may edit it or add something to make it better

Answer 1

There will be a time we will all feel love. You are in love if you have a strong affection or attachment to someone. It could be your family, your friends or someone of the opposite sex. We all feel love for a different reason, it may be because we feel happy with that person, we feel comfortable being with him or her or you trust him or her. But one thing that all persons in love have in common is that they have joy in their hearts. Loving is also the most beautiful thing you will experience.

There are three dimensions of love it is passion, intimacy and commitment. Passion is the powerful emotion that you give when you are with that person you love. Intimacy is the close connection with each other and willing to understand each other. Lastly, commitment is helping each other with their problems and loving unconditionally. With all these dimensions of love, your relationship will last long and happy.

Answer 2

A few things: "It could be your family, your friends or someone of the opposite sex." It's not clear what "it" is referring to. you may want to link it to the previous sentence. "You are in love if you have a strong affection or attachment to someone such as a family member, a friend or someone of the opposite sex."

Answer 3

Also this is a run on sentence that needs to be cleaned up: "We all feel love for a different reason, it may be because we feel happy with that person, we feel comfortable being with him or her or you trust him or her. " Try something like: "We all feel love for different reasons. These reasons might include..."

Answer 4

Also: "But one thing that..." You shouldn't start a sentence with a conjunction.

Answer 5

"There are three dimensions of love it is passion, intimacy and commitment."

You should change "it is" to "they are"

Answer 6

Just a few suggestions. Good Luck!