Question

Hey Guys!
OK check this out i have to do this assignment it call what my Mood and this what i can pick But i Picked
Happy
Sad
Excited
Really angry (“t-d off”)
Depressed
Annoyed
Bored
Frightened
However, you will not be allowed to use the mood word in your paragraph. You must convey the feeling of the mood without “telling” me what your mood is. Your finished paragraph should look like the example above.

Answer 1

i also i picked Mad

Answer 2

I’m like hot water bowling in a pot, very, very hot that will leave a big burn stain. Face turning red like a tomato closing my eyes very tight, holding my breath. Squeezing my hand in to a fist. Slowly grabbing my hair, feeling like screaming.

Answer 3

dose that sound good?!

Answer 4

It's good but to get a better effect, show, don't tell. First cut out they "very's". Their are much more descriptive words than very. Instead of using short, choppy sentances, let the words flow into one descriptive line. Here's my revised copy:


It's as though I'm hot water boiling in a pot so scorching that, upon touch, blisters instantly form. Face turning as red as a freshly picked tomato, I force my eyes shut and take in a gulp of air only to hold it tightly in my lungs. I sqeeze my hands into a tight fist, knuckles turning white, then slowly bring them to my head and grab a clump of my hair. I felt a scream bubbling in my throat but forced it back down.

Answer 5

Wow that was pretty intense, both were good. I believe that shelby's metaphors and similes are what enhanced it ten-fold.

Answer 6

Wow that good Thank u Shelbylugal ^ ^