Question

Critique my poem?

Answer 1

Almost

Huddled in the classroom
All alone
Crouching in the corner
I found the little boy
Covered in dust
Backpack on
Lunchbox in hand

He was barely breathing
Probably wasn’t going to make it
But I looked at his frightened,
Tear, stained face and knew
That I had to try and help

I carefully scooped him
Into my arms
And began the journey to
The hospital

His breaths became shallower
And shallower
As he struggled to survive

With urgency
I began sprinting

Over ruble
Past burning buildings
Children crying
People dying

As I ran faster
I reached the hospital
Only to find
It was no longer there

We had almost made it.

Answer 2

What kind of poem is it?

Answer 3

it's a tragic one.

Answer 4

Oh really, I though it was romantic.

Answer 5

I was questioning what kind of poem it was, not what genre of poem it fell under, if you are going to be in the writing "room" I suggest you read up a bit.

Answer 6

very good poem u should be a poem writer. :)

Answer 7

ok,im a poetic person and it was beautiful. there was a lot of powerful and meanigful words. poems arent all suppose to rhyme but its the emotion that goes into the writing that creates a picture. very good.... little rough but nothing you cant work on:)