If someone would be so kind as to lend a hand editing this poem I've written. It's already been revised twice but an outside opinion is needed. My major problem lies with the second last line :D

Only the moon shines in the dark hours,
a sun long set closes the flowers.
The exquisite heat of summer melts the breeze
while ardent lovers seek to please.

Focused under the dark lens of night
love runs ablaze driving poets to write.
On the wind rides a melody of closing,
the shift of the seasons already imposing;
but tonight we'll feel the beat of a mad drummer
Taken in by the sweet cur

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If someone would be so kind as to lend a hand editing this poem I've written. It's already been revised twice but an outside opinion is needed. My major problem lies with the second last line :D

Only the moon shines in the dark hours,
a sun long set closes the flowers.
The exquisite heat of summer melts the breeze
while ardent lovers seek to please.

Focused under the dark lens of night
love runs ablaze driving poets to write. 
On the wind rides a melody of closing,
the shift of the seasons already imposing;
but tonight we'll feel the beat of a mad drummer
Taken in by the sweet cur

anonymous · Answer

Lol... I messed up a tad in posting, the night/write lines are a separate couplet apart from the following verse.

anonymous · Answer

I would take out the capital T and put a period in at the end of the poem, but other than that, unique. Very pretty. I like it :)