Question

has anyone ver written a flash fiction before? and would like to proof read my paper? please

Answer 1

Sure, I've written a few for contests, feel free to message me it or something!

Answer 2

For NikhilRam: I'm pretty sure this needs a lot of work... haha... and thanks by the way

Answer 3

Well the first step is to axe all passive voice (to be, are, etc). I like your story but the issue is that with flash fiction's word constraint, you can't lavish words on a long, confusing sentence like "What Gracie saw wasn’t something that is known to be of familiarity to man." Instead you could say, Gracie witnessed an unfamiliar sight. It conveys all of the same ideas but without extra words, which will help. I know a lot of CW teachers assign FF in order to teach compactness of prose, so trying to compress these passive sentences will be a good first start.

Also, the dialogue should go like ("Hello," Victor said) as opposed to (:Hello", said Victor). Punctuation inside quotations.

The third suggestion is add some details about Gracie and Victor. For example, if you want to convey that Gracie has weight problems yet is determined to beat them, you can talk about how she ran out, even as she became sweaty and out of breath. Or you could mention how Victor seemed to maintain the pace with a confident ease.

I hope that was helpful and I think you've got a great FF in the making!

Answer 4

Thanks A LOT!! This does Help... :)

Answer 5

I love writing flash fiction! :) I can totally give you my opinion on your paper if youd like :)

Answer 6

that sounds great... not sure if you can see my attachment in in the comment above? but yeah, sure go ahead. The more the better :) Thanks

Answer 7

you have a really good and extensive vocabulary! :) the one thing id watch is your punctuation in quotations, and using the smallest amount of words as possible. make sure you put the commas, periods, etc. inside the quotes, not outside. and after ending quotes, writers often use words like said, asked, or yelled, which I noticed you did. My advice would be to mix it up a bit. Try using some other phrases such as "she teased." or "he sighed."

If you were writing a normal story, using alot of words would be great. But since this IS flash fiction, trying to cut down on sentences would be wise. Keep everything as pact as possible. But you're already doing a pretty good job of that, I just thought I'd throw that out there because its a good thing to keep in mind.

Lastly, I'd suggest giving your audience a little background on the characters. It doesn't have to be a whole lot, just a couple sentences that help us get to know them better.

I really like the idea you came up with for your story :) Its very creative, and with a little editing, your story will be perfect! :)

Answer 8

THANKS!!! I REALLY APPRECIATE IT!!! AWESOME!!!

Answer 9

no problem :) if you ever need any help or writing tips, feel free to ask! :)

Answer 10

I might upload it again after I finish editing to hear how close to getting it haha... :) and I will definitely be using this :0

Answer 11

yay! :) cant wait to read it and see what you do with your characters :)