How can I shorten my thesis? Anyone? Please?

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anonymous · Answer

Ultimately, due to Hamlet’s distress and his moral nature, he ponders life’s questions about the importance of existence, and concludes that it is better to live because he feels an obligation to protect his kingdom, and to avenge his murdered father and not the fear of the unknown nature of the afterlife.

anonymous · Answer

umm no its good the way it is, however your verbs are a bit off.

anonymous · Answer

my verbs? oouu.. how can i not make it a bit off?

anonymous · Answer

to avenge and to protect becuase it in the same sentence with the other vers like ponders and concludes, instead of the "because" i think it be better to replace it with a semicolon

anonymous · Answer

You can shorten thesis by making to the point and exact rather than  having a whole big paragraph. A thesis is usually one sentence.

anonymous · Answer

Just give 2 or 3 main facts on why and say what u are talking about. Only keep it 1 sentence long. Hope that helped lol. Good luck!