Question

Need Opinions: Please

Answer 1

Need opinions on my poem

Answer 2

Stanza 1:
It was pouring rain, but there I stood
Crying, Laughing, Sobbing, Chuckling
Yes, I was new in their neighborhood
I tried and tried but it didn’t work, at least I understood
They said it couldn’t be done but I was doing something

Answer 3

Stanza 2:
The chances they gave me wasn’t fair
They threw me right over the edge,
Expecting that I would know what to do in mid air
As I was falling they told me that was the fare,
But how was I to know that there was a pledge

Answer 4

Stanza 3:

Suddenly the wind began to stir.
It carried me further and further away
Now, as I fell, everything became a blur
And I, myself, was now an amateur
Now that I could do this I have new rules to obey

Answer 5

Stanza 4:

A wise man always said that it cannot be
But who is to define the word wise
It was pouring rain, but there I stood with glee
With all the possibilities
And that man that told me no, I despise

Answer 6

thats it

Answer 7

You wrote that? Impressive

Answer 8

I guess the only thing missing is a title

Answer 9

Oh the title... It is Triumph... I forgot to put it on:D lol I have a WattPad that it is on too:D

Answer 10

Mind explaining exactly what is going on in the poem?

Answer 11

I didn't see a way to interpret what is really happening

Answer 12

You're supposed to give clues as to what is really going on.

Answer 13

Some one is finding their way through the world... it is like a person that is confused on where to go in life but the "voice" in his head tell him that.. he needs to continue on. But there is another voice in his head telling him to give up and the wind that stirred is him making up his mind to go the right way in life:D

Answer 14

POEM IS ABOVE AT THE TOP^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^

Answer 15

I'm not a poem tutor. So I really cannot be of much help. However, I do believe your poem would be much better if what you were describing was a particular event that the person was participating in as a new citizen in a new community and was being observed by many people and was feeling the weight on his/her shoulders to prove him/herself to everyone that he/she is a hard worker.

Answer 16

Ok thanks for your opinion

Answer 17

You could still speak metaphorically with your poem and give hints as to what event the person is participating in. You could even use some event in history as the "stage".

Answer 18

Maybe ill write another poem with that type of format:D

Answer 19

Good luck with it :D

Answer 20

Ok thanks:D