Question

URGENT: I need constructive criticism on this poem.

The facade for no one
There is nowhere else to run
She is told to put on this show
But all she wants to say is “No”
She is forced to put on this mask
Ready for everybody to bask
She smiles with no success
At the place without The Rejects
She tries so hard to please
But there is nothing for anyone to see
She struggles, she wants to yelp
But there is no help
It all became too much for her
She knew what was going to occur
It was her last show to give
There was no other reason for her to live
With her ready knife,
she stabbed at her life
They all looked and laughed
They left her there for the draft
The facade melted off her face
She finally won this race
The facade for no one
There was nowhere else to run

Answer 1

This is a great poem. I may want to point out something here.
Some of the sentences should be written as follows:-
- But all she wants is to say is a straight "No."
- But there is no one to help.

Answer 2

This is a indeed great! Liked it immensely!

@ParthKohli actually her usage of the phrases is pretty right, because the no. of syllables need to be matched. Poetry was never about grammar anyways ;)

Answer 3

I fail at writing. :|

Answer 4

Lol, you'll learn soon (this as well :P) ;)

Answer 5

Btw, "there is no one to help" was actually a right correction @ParthKohli , it would make the syllable-count alright. (I missed somehow)

There! Now you know writing as well! :p