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Answer 1

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Answer 2

Hey im pretty much done editing it but question: is it supposed to be acting like you already did the goals or present tense???

Answer 3

Tom Landry once said, “Setting a goal is not the main thing. It is how you will go about achieving it and staying with that plan.”(Thinkexist.com). In my bucket list paper, my three goals are graduating high school, becoming a Neonatal Nurse and getting married. Accomplishing each of these goals will naturally show how I change before and after I accomplish these goals.
Every goal I set for myself is important, but the most important one for me to achieve, in order to complete the rest, is graduating high school. I walk into the building and see all the familiar faces, hurrying to find my friends and see what classes we have in common. As the bell rings for the first class of the day you hear people fumbling over their lockor combinations over and over then lockers slamming, people yelling, and smell the odor of new paint on the walls. It is my senior year of high school. The goal of graduation says many things about a person. As for me, it says that I am determined and responsible. This goal could describe me as a determined person because I have made sure that I passed everycourse taken over the years of high school. Trying to be the best I can be to work hard at every assignment and task is hard but, after I complete my goal it will all be worth it. I have quite a bit of motivation that helps and pushes me to strive for my goals. Finishing high school would not only open many doors for me, but would also give me a lot of opportunities. Finding a student with the dream of a high school diploma is common, but finding one who is eager to learn is rare.
Not only am I determined to reach this goal; I am also inquisitive. To be inquisitive is being eager and curious to gain knowledge. I consider myself to have this trait because I am willing to learn and do the hard work to succeed. ****Some might say falling asleep in class and falling behind in work would make you the opposite, but I believe I am inquisitive. I like to learn new things and gain more knowledge, not only for the grades but for myself to grow as a person. Having this characteristic is very important if one wants to achieve something they are striving for. Knowing the traits I have that push me to have this goal are interesting, but seeing how this goal will change me as a person is even more fascinating.
Graduating high school made me independent and curious. Every student feels on top of the world and like they are an adult when they have graduated. But, with graduation comes a lot of responsibility and independence. Since I have accomplished my main goal, I have become a more independent individual. This has occurred by taking on new tasks and not only acting like an adult but, taking on the responsibilities of one. Becoming more independent feels great knowing you can make your own choices and do as one pleases. Obtaining this quality is not easy it means providing for myself and doing most things on my own. This would include, financially supporting myself, paying my own bills, signing my own checks, relying on myself, not procrastinating and planning the things I need to do around my time and not everyone else’s. Curiosity is what opens new doors and is what makes dreams possible. I feel that I am a more curious person now than ever because of this fulfillment. Graduating is not just to be free, but it is to get one started on their life ahead. Being curious has had its advantages; it has made me interested in a certain field which will impact my future forever.
My future has been impacted by many things that have surrounded me throughout my life. The achievement of graduation has made the biggest impact on me and will for the rest of my life. This important event has made me have a greater chance of employment and increased my focus level. Many believe that graduating high school means a good job in the future; I am one of those believers. Employers look at a person with a high school diploma over one with a GED, because that tells them that that person is determined and responsible. Since graduation, I feel more confident in getting my dream job and feel I have an advantage. Employers need a hardworking, focused employee. Completing high school will make me a more focused person for many reasons. One reason is because I would know that I came this far and slacking would just throw everything I worked hard for away. Another reason why I will be a more focused person is, with all this knowledge I have gained it will make me focused on the next step. I will work harder and always know in the back of my head what I have ahead of me. The next move in my life that I need to be focused on is becoming a Neonatal Nurse.
Throughout my life I have three main goals, my biggest heart-set and rewarding goal is to become a Neonatal Nurse(N.N.N) By wanting to become N.N.N, it says that today I am a caring and passionate person. The thought of everyday walking into a cold building, rubber shoes squeaking, the sound of babies crying, phones ringing off the hook, and the smell of medicine might not intrigue someone to consider this career. Despite all of this, going to a place every day with something new ahead and coming out accomplished, proud and the thought of knowing you made a difference is what strives me and has changed me into who I am today.
**In the time since I accomplished my goal of becoming a Neonatal Nurse it has changed me in many different ways. Getting to experience helping and improving someone’s life not only changes that person, but it changes mine in many ways. One change that has occurred is experience. I have took control of my goal and made it into a life-long dream. I have moved up from a Certified Nursing Assistant to a Neonatal Nurse. This has given me a lot of new knowledge and experience with new people and techniques. I am now doing my “own thing” each day, and being in a more professional setting is more rewarding. I have gained a lot of knowledge since my accomplishment. Even though conquering my goal has given me more experience and education, it has also made me more of an adaptable person.
Nursing **has helped me to become more adaptive. I have obtained this trait by knowing no day is entirely like the next. That being said, I have had to adapt to different occurrences. The patients and workers can be unpredictable at times. Therefore, to be a nurse you need to be felxiable and adaptable. Since becoming a Neonatal Nurse, it has not only changed me personally but has impacted my future.
Nursing will impact my future financially and give me opportunity. In many ways nursing will make me financially stable and secure. I will have an increased hourly wage, also being lucky enough to have definite set amount of hours. This will impact my future because I will know my price range. Knowing what I can and cannot afford ahead of time, will help me start saving for my future needs and wants. Nursing is a great career for opportunity. Nursing is considered one of the best and most needed fields. It will provide me with a lot of areas to explore. After accomplishing my nursing goal, I would like to get married.
Getting married is a common goal of most and a big step in life, but it will full fill a big part of my journey. The want to get married can characterize a person in a few different ways. As for me, this goal means I am faithful and joyful. The reason I consider myself to be faithful is because I can stick to one person and not cheat or be deceiving. Committing to one person for the rest of my life is something I would love to do. My biggest want when I get married, is for it to be on a beach. Getting married is also a life-long event, and if a person cannot be faithful this is not a goal for them. I am joyful because I believe I can make someone happy for the rest of their life, also I have the want to be happy for the rest of mine. Being joyful is the want to be happy; which is exactly what I want when I choose to get married. Not only does this goal say a lot about me personally, but it also shows how it will change me.
Marriage will make me a more secure, and delighted person. Being secure is a nice trait to have but also a needed trait of most. I feel I would become more secure because, my spouse would provide me with someone to always talk to, comfort me, be more financially secure, and improve my overall well-being. Also, making this commitment will make me more delightful. Everyone becomes happier when they are married, knowing they have someone to start their life with. I will be a delighted person knowing I have someone to lean on, and confide in your “best friend” and to start a family with. People are also known to be healthier having a spouse, mentally, emotionally and physically. Becoming married will impact me personally, and impact my future tremendously.
Making the commitment of marriage will impact not only my life, but also my spouse’s life. Decision-making is a huge factor in marriage. Any decision I make no matter how big or small will have to be compromised with my significant other and we will make the decisions together. They will not just be made by myself. Everything I do as of the day I get married will no longer just involve me, but him as well. When I think of marraige...I consider the thought of children; which would bring up many more issues in the future, including the concern of morals, religion, schooling, safetey, nutrition, values and so many other things! A definate trait to be gained would be selflessness. As I will learn to share a home, and putting someone else before me.
Now having **accomplished my three main goals on my bucket list, I have realized who I was, who I am, and who I want to become. Since being dedicated to completing high school, it has lead me on my road to becoming a well-experienced Neonatal nurse and with a wonderful husband that I could eventually share my goals, dreams and values with.

Answer 4

The first sentence with *****<--- you need to revise that to make sence or take it out, it doesnt go with the rest of your paper

Ok the ones with ** <--- you will need to change them into present tense. unless your paper is supposed to act like you already did those things....

Answer 5

I revised all awkward sentences throughout the paper though so it can flow more but the ones i put stars by need to be done by you

Answer 6

Some might say falling asleep in class and falling behind in work would make you the opposite, but I believe I am inquisitive. <--- take it out it makes no sense lol

Answer 7

thanks (: i explained the question you asked in a message

Answer 8

I kind of like the use of the present tense. It actually adds an interesting element to the paper that makes it a bit more interesting than most other high school academic papers. However, in addition to the to the good feedback @jennilalala provided, it would be wise to go back through it and eliminate instances of the second person. When you use the word 'you' in a paper you are introducing your reader into the content, which can be distracting. This is because not all readers may agree with what you are telling them they would do or think.

Just for random example: In your paper you say, "Becoming more independent feels great knowing you can make your own choices and do as one pleases." This is your own opinion and I may not agree with it. Maybe I think that becoming independent does not feel great at all. Maybe I feel that becoming independent feels scary because I will not have my parents there to help me solve my problems anymore. By using the word 'you', you have caused an internal argument within your reader and distracted him or her from actually getting your message.

It would be better to instead phrase that sentence as, "Becoming more independent feels great knowing I can make MY own choices and do as I please." Not only does this tell your reader how YOU feel, they are more likely to respect that opinion since they are not having an internal dialog about how they feel. Also in this particular sentence you use the second person and then switch to third person at the end (". . . do as one pleases."). This is bad form. Only use one perspective within single sentences.

Answer 9

that was good advice thanks alot !!(: